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The Ring

September 23, 2009
By Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
Lia Newman SILVER, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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“I’ll never let you go, I just love you so!” I smiled, singing as I cooked dinner. Everything couldn’t be better. I’ve got a delicious turkey, mashed potatoes drowned in gravy, and bright purple cranberry sauce. Opening the refrigerator I peered inside.
“I’ll love you to the very end. You’ll be there, my forever friend!” I sang, loud and cheerfully. I twirled around and began to dance. Until I saw that James was there.
“Oh!” I cried out in surprise. James didn’t smile. Blushing, I closed the refrigerator door.
“What’s the matter, James?” I said as I kissed him on the cheek. James motioned for me to sit down. I could tell that this was serious and took a seat. Leaning forward I asked him,
“Come on, tell me the secret. We’ve known each other long enough, have we not?” James shook his head and looked down. Quizzically I looked into his eyes. His deep blue, luxurious eyes; eyes that I’ve wanted for so long. For too long.
“It’s Eliza. She…she was found. In the forest.” James said, his voice shaking uncontrollably. It was the day after the proposal when Eliza had disappeared. She had gone on her usual night walk. Everything had gone so well. James and Eliza had gotten engaged! James had gotten her the most beautiful ring. A marvelous blue diamond, clear as the blue sky, had been placed on her finger. This was the happiest day of their lives! Then Eliza and the ring never came back. Ever since then, I’ve been spending more time with James, hoping…
We looked for her, for a week straight. We never found her. With James crying on my shoulder, he accepted that she was gone. Now, Thanksgiving, this had to happen. I was furious! Why did they have to find her? For god’s sake, it’s Thanksgiving! Quickly putting the anger away, I let the long awaited sadness wave through me. Taking James’s hand into mine, I whispered,
“I’m so sorry, James. I really, truly am.” I started to rub his hand, trying to be a good person. But really, what was I supposed to do in this kind of situation? I looked deep into his eyes and watched them widen.
“James, what’s wrong?” I asked. James just stared at my hand in horror. Quickly letting go of my hand, he stood up.
“You…you have the ring!” James cried in terror. I smiled.

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HelloLove said...
on May. 27 2010 at 9:05 am
HelloLove, Dexter, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Twinkle, twinkle, little bat! How I wonder what you're at.
Tut, tut, child! Everything's got a moral, if only you can find it.

This is amazing. It kept me guessing!

LaChapIs said...
on May. 13 2010 at 12:19 pm
Well, at least I can Spell God right and that is much more important

Really? said...
on May. 12 2010 at 12:45 pm
Before you correct someone about proper spelling, "vane" is spelled VAIN.

LaChApIs said...
on Apr. 27 2010 at 4:14 pm
Good ending at the end that's not nice to kill someone!

LaChApIs said...
on Apr. 27 2010 at 4:12 pm
God is spelld with a capital G! have some respect please!  especially if you going to use his name in vane!

on Apr. 16 2010 at 9:56 am
Basketball4everr GOLD, Smithtown, New York
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really good- i loved the suspence but i wish it was longer or more to it. over all good job

amaranth178 said...
on Apr. 5 2010 at 8:22 am
amaranth178, Washington, District Of Columbia
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The pace used and the suspense created were great!

TeaganOlivia said...
on Apr. 1 2010 at 11:35 am
TeaganOlivia, Someplace, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Today is Yesterday's Tomorrow.
Certainty of death, small chance of success... What are we waiting for? :D ♥
Pippin: "Anyways you need people of intelligence on this sort of...mission. Quest. Thing."
Merry: "Well that rules you out Pip," :D ♥
There are some people who live in a dream world, and there are some who face reality; and then there are those who turn one into the other."
---Douglas Everett

OMG!!!!! that was amazing great twist at the end!!!!

JacobC GOLD said...
on Mar. 25 2010 at 6:31 am
JacobC GOLD, Belgium, Wisconsin
10 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Am I indecisive? Well, yes and no." -Anonymous

Great story! The ending was the best!

full size said...
on Mar. 24 2010 at 9:31 am
keep up the great work.It was pretty scary but really good through.You caught my interest in a split second!

on Mar. 21 2010 at 9:15 pm
AlyssaFama SILVER, Kunkletown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Most people want to be the sun that brightens your day. I'd rather be the moon that shines down on you in your darkest hour.

truly amazing... please write more! and check out some of my work as well

wasupdog said...
on Mar. 16 2010 at 7:52 pm
wasupdog, Denver, Colorado
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Review of The Ring

By: Madison Ferner

The short story The Ring, by Lia N. Lake Oswego, focuses on character and character development. At the beginning, the girl, the main character, is sweet and jolly for example, “Everything couldn’t be better.” She was cooking and very happy. She loves this guy named James and in the end she takes action for her desires. “Quickly letting of my hand he stood up. You have the ring.” She killed his true love, because she wants him. She’s a killer.

James= “I’ll never let you go, I just love you so!” This quote leads me to believe that James is very loving and sweet, but at the end when the girl has the ring he doesn’t change, he’s just shocked. When the girl had the ring at the end I thought that she killed the husbands wife, because she went missing, and James gave her a ring that she had. She is an evil killing girl. With these two characters it’s a great mix. You have a nice kindhearted person and then you have a killer. It’s very interesting, because these two characters are completely opposite. The characters both develop in their own way that is interesting because of how different they are.

I wonder what will happen next? What will James do now that she has his wife’s ring?

on Mar. 3 2010 at 4:02 pm
MusicIsLife013 SILVER, New York, New York
6 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Light, like the flutter of wings, feel your hollow voice rushing into me
As you're longing to sing" -AFI

"Here we go again, I kinda wanna be more than friends, so take it easy on me I'm afraid you're never satisfied." -Neon Trees

wow this was so great!! I love the ending!

on Mar. 3 2010 at 3:37 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
11 articles 8 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

WHOA!!!!!! I loved the very end!!! It just made my heart do a little lurch!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write more!!!!!!!! You have us hooked-- we want more!!!

BleedingRose said...
on Mar. 3 2010 at 11:10 am
OMG! This is so awesome! I love this, and the twist is great! Very awesome job, keep writing! :)

on Feb. 19 2010 at 11:50 am
stelar i fart but i love it poooooooop!

jennam8 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 11:13 am
jennam8 GOLD, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
12 articles 27 photos 56 comments
The ending was great! I gasped :P Great twist!!

on Feb. 9 2010 at 11:05 am
eep! did she kill eliza?!?!?! write more!

E.Lee GOLD said...
on Feb. 9 2010 at 10:30 am
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
15 articles 0 photos 168 comments
lol shes crazy! hah i like this alot:)

on Jan. 25 2010 at 2:26 pm
lily1411 BRONZE, Fargo, North Dakota
2 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
Absence sharpens love, presence strengthens it.

--Benjamin Franklin

i love stories like this where something bad happens and then in the end, you figure out that whomever is telling the story did it! or at least something you don't expect to happen.