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Lost In Wonderland

February 15, 2013
By Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!


Summary:

Ava Danning, having only 3 bridges to the world...when one of her bridges breaks down. How will she cope with it?


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Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Nov. 24 2013 at 5:29 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Mckay, thank you so much! It means so much to me, you know! I only wrote this when I was ten, and I didn't edit it since! Thank you!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Nov. 12 2013 at 5:42 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2230 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Keep writing is my one single advice. Keep perfecting the story. It's good as it is. Nonetheless, with novels, one must always seek perfection; that is, the bit of perfection any human can achieve, if possible. Great story. Keep developing these characters; they're enjoyable to read about and decipher their true natures. 

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on Oct. 25 2013 at 10:01 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

Hey Calliashi! Thanks for reading my work! Yes, even though Ava's father is pushy, abusive and selfish, and I have hinted that, she (though she won't confess it ot front) has a small part which cares for him becuase he's her father after all. Thanks and I'll be reading your work, but my laptop broke :(

on Oct. 21 2013 at 9:23 am
Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The man with the key is king and honey, you should see me in a crown. ~James Moriarty

This is a pretty good story. I like how you're vague about what's happened in the first chapter. However I'm very curious about the father. Ava talks about him like some horrible awful person and Keas describes him as ruthless and pushing people too much. It almost makes him sound violent or abusive. I don't know if that's your intention but thats what it sounds like.

Tizzy BRONZE said...
on May. 20 2013 at 8:35 am
Tizzy BRONZE, Dhaka, Other
2 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
I sleep to much, parents complain. I sleep less, parents complain. I go out too much, parents complain. I don't go out too much, parents complain. I play games too much, parents complain. I play games less, parents complain. I CANT WIN!

thank you!!!

HammadWaseem said...
on May. 20 2013 at 8:28 am
HammadWaseem, Lahore, Other
0 articles 5 photos 283 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be proud of who you are.
-Eminem

You can't see me
-John Cena

Ooh, somebody stop me!
-Mask

very good!