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The Ultimate Price

March 15, 2011
By jackchase PLATINUM, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
jackchase PLATINUM, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
27 articles 0 photos 1 comment


Fat, freak, weird, and heartbroken. Those words describe Walter Williams in the beginning of junior high. But by the end of it all, the words change.
Sweet, caring, thoughtful, unjustified, and murdered.

The only girl he truly loved had chosen another, better looking person. How can he ever compete with him, and is it all worth it in the end?

William B.

The Ultimate Price

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This book has 8 comments.

on Apr. 3 2012 at 2:05 pm
Zuccini75 BRONZE, Chantilly, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is better to keep your mouth shut and let people wonder, than telling them yourself."

That nearly made me cry... it was really good! Keep writing :)

on Apr. 3 2012 at 2:17 am
nemish23 BRONZE, Sydney, Other
2 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The happiest people don't necessarily have the best of everything;
They just make the most of everything they have."

"Today is life. The only life we're sure of. Make the most of today." -CSI:NY


love it! you could even take the concept and create a longer story.

great job!

on Oct. 10 2011 at 12:13 pm
Bookworm1998 GOLD, Brampton, Other
17 articles 2 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
Preserve your memories, keep them well; what you forget, you can never retell.

this was a really good story that many people can realte to (the struggles of realtionships, not the killing), which i think is key in a good book.  good on you! :)

on Sep. 18 2011 at 11:28 pm
Country_Storm_Inspired, The Colony, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 28 comments
wow. im overweight and i can relate to walter. this story truely made me cry and i will tell everyone i know to read it!

on Jun. 21 2011 at 3:30 pm
It was amazing, I admit I almost cried. I loved it and I think you are a fantastic writer. Keep it up:)

Sydney55 said...
on Mar. 18 2011 at 4:59 pm
This is AMAZING! I love this soo much!!!! You need to publish this baby!

on Mar. 17 2011 at 7:04 pm
jackchase PLATINUM, Highlands Ranch, Colorado
27 articles 0 photos 1 comment
oh my gosh thank u SO MUCH this is the very first love story i ever wrote and the first peice i ever published i was so worried, i know not EVERYONE will like it, but just that ONE person said it was good, u have no idea how much it means to me:) thank u SO SO much

on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:38 pm
Taylor_Renee GOLD, St. Paul, Minnesota
10 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you will live forever,
Live as if you will die tomorrow.