Gotchya ;) Don't be afraid to touch it up to your liking. I never stop with mine :)

Thanks for the response! I also considered that when writing this, but I had a deadline for school and decided to go with the Memory Liberators as allies.

This is an very intruiging story. I like the idea of people stealing others memories, just for comercial buisnesses. Clever to pull in the facts in just the first and second chapter - it's a little fast paced, but not too quick. However, I would consider less usage of 'I' to begin sentences. It's tricky, but would give it some more flow. Also, maybe add in more thought process and description. In the second chapter, I was wondering how Max was taking it all in, and why he decided to listen to the man so willingly - what if he was a memory theif coming to take Max's memory of the incident? It didn't take too much away from the story though. Great work!