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I Need You

May 4, 2009
By Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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&quot;If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?&quot; - Mario Pei<br /> &quot;I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn&#039;t, I would die.&quot; Isaac Asimov

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You are my sun,
I can't live without you,
You are my rain,
Without you I will wither.

When you're not here,
It's cloudy,
When you aren't near,
It's dry as a desert.
I can live without you-
For a little while,
But not for long.

When you are near,
But I can't see your face,
It's like the heavy clouds,
That don't deliver their
Promised rain.
I need you.

© Chuck K., Marblehead, MA

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This article has 7 comments.

AndThisIsReal PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 15 2009 at 9:20 am
AndThisIsReal PLATINUM, Broadalbin, New York
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Dans chaque fil il y a un debut.

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Mhm.

I love the last stanza.
FreakyEyed DIAMOND said...
on Jun. 8 2009 at 4:20 am
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
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&quot;This, too, will pass.&quot;

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I feel the same way with my beloved... the Earth doesn't seem to pin properly without his presence...
despurlock DIAMOND said...
on May. 30 2009 at 6:33 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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&quot;The heart has its reasons which reason does not know.&quot; -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

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I also enjoyed his poem!!! You have a very unique style of writing that I just can't pinpoint, but I love it! I'm hooked! :)
windswift DIAMOND said...
on May. 23 2009 at 4:04 am
windswift DIAMOND, Arvada, Colorado
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let it burn, suffering teaches the soul; let it grow, love nourishes the heart.

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i really enjoyed this piece of work, its one of the many poems that i will add to my lists of favorites from teen ink. this poem will definetly change my perspective on the way that things work everyday!
Abreika GOLD said...
on May. 21 2009 at 8:01 pm
Abreika GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
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Hey I dropped by since commented my poem and I think your poem is great!
WriterDancerLover GOLD said...
on May. 19 2009 at 11:23 pm
WriterDancerLover GOLD, Fontana, California
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Hey I saw your comment so I decided to check out your work too~ it was definitely worth it! I really enjoyed it, and I hope to see more of your work. Great job.
hey_itskatelyn PLATINUM said...
on May. 18 2009 at 9:01 pm
hey_itskatelyn PLATINUM, Willis, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;God, of your goodness, give me yourself; you are enough for me, and anything less that I could ask for would not do you full honour. And if I ask anything that is less, I shall always lack something, but in you alone I have everything&rdquo;

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Hey i saw ur comment and i thought i would check out some of ur work like u asked. I like this poem. At times, though, i stumbled through the lines. It lacks a sense of flow. Maybe work on the phrasing. Other than that, i think you have a great topic and lots to work with!(: