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December 12, 2013
By Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

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i feel a hiraeth for a million different places,
'cause the homeless feel nostalgic about
empty spaces

and maybe i never slept in as warm a bed
as my fantasies lead me to believe i
slept in instead

of the cold, hard ground pressing my cheek,
while millions of nice shoes pass by
week after week

well something keeps me parallel to the floor,
and if it's my past and my memories,
i can't create more

'cause i can't go any lower than i am right now
lest to dust i return and water the soil
with the sweat on my brow

so bury me next to our childhood playground
when i'm done trying to fly though
i'm feeling drowned

© Calvin C., Salt Lake City, UT

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freeperson DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 22 2013 at 1:17 pm
freeperson DIAMOND, Burlington, Vermont
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&quot;Have you seen the way he looks at you, the way his expression softens and his eyes are like stars...?&quot; - Ara Weston

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Who said it had to be perfect? 
Jade.I.Am ELITE said...
on Dec. 21 2013 at 9:35 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

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The rhythm is so awkward XD but thanks
freeperson DIAMOND said...
on Dec. 19 2013 at 5:40 pm
freeperson DIAMOND, Burlington, Vermont
59 articles 0 photos 229 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Have you seen the way he looks at you, the way his expression softens and his eyes are like stars...?&quot; - Ara Weston

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You kidding? how could you not like this? 
Jade.I.Am ELITE said...
on Dec. 19 2013 at 1:00 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;If you&#039;re losing your soul and you know it, then you&#039;ve still got a soul left to lose&rdquo; <br /> ― Charles Bukowski

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Thanks (: this is actually the one I like the least, lol
TargonTheDragon GOLD said...
on Dec. 19 2013 at 10:32 am
TargonTheDragon GOLD, Ofallon, Missouri
15 articles 16 photos 292 comments

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First dentistry was painless.<br /> Then bicycles were chainless,<br /> Carriages were horseless,<br /> And many laws enforceless.<br /> <br /> Next cookery was fireless,<br /> Telegraphy was wireless,<br /> Cigars were nicotineless,<br /> And coffee caffeineless.<br /> <br /> Soon oranges were seedless,<br /> The putting green was weedless,<br /> The college boy was hatless,<br /> The proper diet fatless.<br /> <br /> New motor roads are dustless,<br /> The latest steel is rustless,<br /> Our tennis courts are sodless,<br /> Our new religion &mdash; godless.

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jade. this is your best. period.    i said on many of your older poems that they were good, and they are, but i just want you to know that this one has something more. its different. it is somehow much better than the others.    then again, maybe the reason it impressed me so much is because im listening to "i see dead people in boats" at the moment, which seemed to fit the mood. (Pirates of the Carribean- At World's End soundtrack).    anyywho. i really loved it. this is a milestone in your writing:)