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Broken Promises

March 11, 2014
By Bethany_Saint GOLD, Dexter, Maine
Bethany_Saint GOLD, Dexter, Maine
14 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never regret something that once made you smile." - Amber Deckers

"Stories are more than just images. As you continue in the tale, you get to know the characters, motivations and conflicts that make up the core of the story...." - Livia Blackburne


She floats down the hall with her friends all in tow,
Wrapped around her ponytail, is an oversized bow.

Eyes are on her with every step,
She’s full of life and so full of pep.

She walks with poise, she walks with grace,
With a smile that’s plastered upon her face.

She made a promise she said she’d keep,
But their praise took her over, now she’s in deep.

I lost her to fame, I lost her to praise,
I lost my best friend, leaving me in a daze.

As I look at her I feel I can't compare,
All eyes are on her everywhere!

It’s driving me crazy; it’s driving me insane,
It’s leaving me with nothing but a heart full of pain.

She has turned into the person she swore she’d never be,
Now she just walks with dignity and ignores me.

I lost my best friend; it’s something I have to accept,
I must forget the promise that she never kept…


The author's comments:
This poem is about a friend making a promise to never change, and then becoming exactly who they said they'd never be...

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on Mar. 28 2014 at 3:14 pm
Bethany_Saint GOLD, Dexter, Maine
14 articles 0 photos 90 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never regret something that once made you smile." - Amber Deckers

"Stories are more than just images. As you continue in the tale, you get to know the characters, motivations and conflicts that make up the core of the story...." - Livia Blackburne

Thanks! :)

on Mar. 26 2014 at 10:48 am
Jflood77 SILVER, Flemington, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you want to be happy, be." ~Leo Tolstoy

Okay, firstly the rhyming is well done. Secondly the lines are clever. Thirdly your voice is very apparent even within the consistent rhyming which is very hard to do, it shows that your rhymes come naturally and the story is being told, its not just a nursery rhyme that doesn't make sense. And its kinda sad too :/ Good job though! :)))