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Soft Blue Eyes MAG

January 6, 2009
By Carissamariew PLATINUM, Cape Coral, Florida
Carissamariew PLATINUM, Cape Coral, Florida
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His soft blue eyes seem almost out of place
In contrast to his rough composure
He takes a puff from far away
But never will he come any closer

He walks as if he’s on top of the world
His body shifts from left to right
On the outside he seems okay
But inside his mind takes flight

He’s quick to clench his fists and swing
His muscles are always tense and ready
He says he’s fine but if you stare too long
You’ll know he’s popped too many

If you ask if he’s all right he’s sure to say, ­honey, don’t worry
But those soft blue eyes, they always tell such a different story.



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on Apr. 12 2016 at 1:40 pm
Luckystar78 ELITE, London, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"..though warm as summer it was fresh as spring." (Thomas Hardy) ("Far from the Madding crowd")

This is beautiful...you write with such an intelligent and human style.

on Nov. 22 2014 at 1:22 am
HafsaAhmed PLATINUM, Karachi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I don't believe in angry arguments , I believe in silent revenge.

Revenge doesn't merely means hurting others, it sometimes mean being a better person than you were yesterday.

simply beautiful

on May. 29 2014 at 8:25 pm
raysofsunshine GOLD, Lakebay, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not about the happy ending, it's about the story."

This is really good! The ending is so beautiful!

Misfit95 said...
on Oct. 8 2012 at 5:21 pm
Misfit95, Dover, Ohio
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i love this. it's very well-written. congrats on getting published in the magazine :)

on Jun. 20 2012 at 11:57 pm
DayDreaamer BRONZE, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Liar liar. Plants for hire!" -Patrick, from Spongebob XD

Wow. This is really nice. I love it :)

bluhs said...
on May. 7 2012 at 5:14 pm
bluhs, E, Alabama
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This was a very well witten piece. 

on Feb. 27 2012 at 3:12 pm
Sammy817 BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
You can't break what is already broken

i love this!

on Jan. 18 2012 at 1:13 pm
ninjanessie GOLD, Piqua, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
The Earth wasn't built for us. We were build for it.

This is truely amazing! it well almost made me cry. the way you wrote it gave me such a vivid image. sadly it reminds me of a guy that i shouldnt even like. from the blue eyes to well every thing else...anyways this is awesome!

on Dec. 27 2011 at 5:19 pm
NightlockFelicis BRONZE, Hudson, Florida
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Wow. This is really great. It's really fluent and well-written. I like it a lot. c:

on Dec. 5 2011 at 6:43 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

This is amazing. Great work!

on Nov. 13 2011 at 1:25 pm
meadowood BRONZE, Sterling, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"For by grace you have been saved through faith." -Ephesians 2:8a

Beautiful.

on Oct. 22 2011 at 11:33 am
LearnLoveLaugh SILVER, Spokane, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughs would make me cry." by Unknown

Wow! Heart felt and genericly depressing... But beautiful. Nice job(:

on Aug. 22 2011 at 2:48 pm
Noel.MCarlson66 GOLD, Waterford, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Things have to get worse before they get better.

Great flow. Keep writing.

on May. 31 2011 at 9:59 pm
Kaleighgirl97 SILVER, Lawson, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"When the rich wage war its the poor who die."














- Jean-Paul Sartre.

I love this poem i hope whoever inspired it is in good shape now.

on May. 4 2011 at 5:20 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

wow :) this is really great! the picture you painted in my mind was amazing! and you did that all with the strength of your words :) i liked the rhythm and flow! if you could, would you mind commenting on some of my work?? i'd appreciate it. PLEASE keep writing, you have talent :)

on Mar. 30 2011 at 9:35 pm
buggzbunnie BRONZE, Middle River, Maryland
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the rhythm made this poem so much  better ethan i think it wouldbe without rhtym .

on Jan. 31 2011 at 6:11 pm
missamanda GOLD, Ft. Collins, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Love. Fall in love and stay in love. Write only what you love, and love what you write. The key word is love. You have to get up in the morning and write something you love, something to live for." -Ray Bradbury

I really liked it! Well done! The writing is fabulous and flows together really well!

 


on Nov. 26 2010 at 5:24 pm
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I-- I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

that's pretty good!! i like it:))

on Oct. 13 2010 at 10:35 am
GreenLover SILVER, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
Time is but a number

good poem!

you should check out some of mine.


HaleyHottie said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 4:55 pm
Loooove.(: