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He loves me, He loves me not.

February 3, 2010
By Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
Nikiblue PLATINUM, Bloomfield Hills, Michigan
20 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stupid Is As Stupid Does." -Forest Gump (;
"No one who achieves success does so without the help of others. The wise and confident acknowledge this help with gratitude."

Pluck number one,
He loves me.
The flower petal dropped to the ground soundlessly,
Laid there on top of the luscious, green grass;
It was unmoving as a peaceful lake undisturbed.

Pluck number two,
He loves me not.
The white pedal fluttered down spinning gracefully,
Landing just beside the first.
How nice.

Pluck number three,
He loves me.
Flashing dazzling, white teeth,
The girl smiled.
Was her luck turning out for the better?

Pluck number four,
He loves me not.
The man she loved was strong and handsome.
His eyes, a light green, could mesmerize her endlessly.
If only he loved her the way she did him.

Pluck number five,
He loves me.
She was just an average, everyday girl,
Who someday hoped to be married with kids.
His kids.

Pluck number 6,
He loves me not.
His name was Michael. Michael Anderson.
He was a quiet young man, not the popular type that most girls loved;
But what wasn’t there to love?

Pluck number 7,
He loves me.
“Sohpie? Where have you been? I’ve been looking for you.”
Sophie turned around to see Michael there, staring at her breathlessly.
“You were looking for me?” she replied, dumbfounded.

Sophie looked down at her decapitated flower;
No more petals to pluck.
She returned her gaze to look him in the eye.
“I love you, Sophie, will you marry me?”
Tears flooded her eyes as she breathed an enchanted “yes.”

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This article has 16 comments.

on Apr. 4 2011 at 8:42 pm
Zaylie PLATINUM, Everett, Washington
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"It's not the kind, the kind you take about it's just the kind that rips the clothing off your mind." -Flyleaf
"You feet in the air, Your head on the ground Try this trick and spin it yeah Your head will colapse when there's nothing it in."-Pixies

This one if I could I'd rate it higher...not kidding. It's a perfect dream come true kind of think. I love it.


on Jul. 6 2010 at 6:35 pm
mary.brodeur BRONZE, Westerly, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"Cause sometimes you just need to throw yourself a party."

this is too cute!! :))

on Apr. 27 2010 at 10:21 pm
Kristy_loves_Keats PLATINUM, Arvada, Colorado
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 so cute!!! i like this... will you look at my work i think you will like it

on Apr. 11 2010 at 7:39 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

This poem has a real nice sense of originality in it. You took something so simple as the cliche saying of "he loves me not" and made it unique. I also love the ending. Check out some of my work if you'd like! 

on Mar. 20 2010 at 5:10 pm
beautifuleyess12 BRONZE, St.Cloud, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 11 comments
This is beautiful <3

I really like this one(:

SirSeba BRONZE said...
on Mar. 16 2010 at 12:30 pm
SirSeba BRONZE, Marysville, California
1 article 9 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Just because you can, doesnt always mean you should" ~ achreon

what a wonderful peice. it was very good and one of the best that i've read.

on Mar. 14 2010 at 8:19 pm
JohnDeereGirl DIAMOND, Westerlo, New York
61 articles 36 photos 216 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I'm not"
"Somewhere betweeen us talking, you saying I deserve better, and you making me laugh when I wanted to cry, I fell in love with you."

This is totally awesome!

on Mar. 14 2010 at 1:09 pm
OurLoveIsTrue GOLD, Johnstown, New York
13 articles 0 photos 7 comments
i really liked this alot ! Very real with the back and forths that love does bring forth to us

vampluv11 GOLD said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:40 am
vampluv11 GOLD, Saugerties, New York
10 articles 1 photo 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go ask Alice.

i agree with something little-miss-sunshine said, to try turning it into a short story. it was excellent, and i loved it!, but the flow does need a little more work. id love to see hw it would turn out in a short story!

on Feb. 26 2010 at 4:02 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

I thought I might mention when I say turn it into a short story I don't mean just put it together differently I mean expand on this little love story with the focus still being pulling the petals off the flower. I also wasn't saying you should do that but that the poem provides a good enough story line for that. Sorry if that confused you, and if it didn't well than I guess this comment was kinda pointless.

on Feb. 26 2010 at 3:49 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
11 articles 0 photos 299 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

This is a very good poem, although I found it didn't flow to well. You could almost make this into a short story! Very cute.

-Missy- BRONZE said...
on Feb. 24 2010 at 10:07 pm
-Missy- BRONZE, Ahhh, South Dakota
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hmmm...very interesting, now lets just think if she landed with a "he loves me not" then what would happen?

think of both ways and think of which one was better...nice poem i guess

on Feb. 22 2010 at 8:22 pm
SmileyFace94 SILVER, Queens, New York
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this is beautiful.

on Feb. 20 2010 at 12:03 pm
Born_to_fly GOLD, Peoria, Arizona
11 articles 4 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I disaprove of what you say, but i will defend to the death your right to say it." ~Voltaire

very beautiful well done.

on Feb. 15 2010 at 11:22 am
alchive PLATINUM, Fort Worth, Texas
38 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
The best cure for writer's block is...to write

yes, a wonderful sentiment and concept. good style!

on Feb. 15 2010 at 7:04 am
ofpaintedroses GOLD, Berne, Indiana
12 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
"How long is forever?"
"Sometimes just one second."

OH MY GOSH! I LOVE IT!!! i cant believe it! if only things would turn out like that...dont know how many flowers i killed.