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May 14, 2010
By Britney15 BRONZE, Attleboro, Massachusetts
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If you choose to stay when everyone leaves
Look blindly on my imperfections
Never judge my words or thoughts
Then you my friend,
Are a true companion
If you defend me in my times of need
Risk your life to save my own
Encourage my ideas to make them reality
Wear a genuine smile whenever I speak
Then you my friend,
Are like my mother
If you talk to me behind closed curtains
Think regularly about my lack of splendor
Judge everything I say or believe
Avoid me in my times of trouble
Then you my friend,
Are a real human being
If you think only of yourself
Trust no one including me
Wear a deceitful smile
Then you my friend
Are smarter then you look

© Raul R., Monte Vista, CO

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Britney15 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 16 2010 at 2:56 pm
Britney15 BRONZE, Attleboro, Massachusetts
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thanx
SimplyRachel PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 7:43 pm
SimplyRachel PLATINUM, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery and today is a gift, that&#039;s why we call it the present.&quot;<br /> ~Unknown<br /> &quot;Things change, friends leave, and life doesn&#039;t stop for anybody.&quot;<br /> ~Stepgen Chbosky

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I love it. You capture what I see in a friend of mine in the most perfect way.
Britney15 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 1:09 pm
Britney15 BRONZE, Attleboro, Massachusetts
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really appreciate that you like my work thanx alot =)
Derfie BRONZE said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 9:34 pm
Derfie BRONZE, Bainbridge, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Will you dance with me now, Heaven&#039;s child?&quot; sang the clown,&quot;We&#039;ve nothing left to lose but your wings and my frown&quot;

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I love your style, i.e. how you don't weaken the statement you're making by hiding behind vague metaphors. You have something to say, you come out and say it, and make the process enjoyable. I'm officially a fan =)
G.M.Palacio SILVER said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 5:48 pm
G.M.Palacio SILVER, Bayamon, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Being happy doesn&#039;t mean everything is perfect. It means you&#039;ve decide to see beyond the imperfections.

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amazing poem!!! this really does have a great strong message i can definitely relate to this you're really good at poems i've read your other ones

oh and if it's not too much to ask please read some of my poems ;)

Egyptiangirl13 GOLD said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 1:24 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\&quot;either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin<br /> <br /> \&quot;If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\&quot; <br /> <br /> \&quot;If music be the food of love, play on.\&quot;

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ur welcome-please check out some of my work!

 

 

Britney15 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 1:08 pm
Britney15 BRONZE, Attleboro, Massachusetts
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thanks so much!!!
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 7:59 am
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\&quot;either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin<br /> <br /> \&quot;If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\&quot; <br /> <br /> \&quot;If music be the food of love, play on.\&quot;

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wow this is awesome!!! great job-its really powerful with a great message!! keep writing!! and pleassseeeeee check out some of my work!!!!;) (nice pic. choice btw)