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Still

December 26, 2010
By OriginalCarbonation GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
OriginalCarbonation GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream as if you'll live forever
live as if you'll die tomorrow


white frothy waves
frozen in time
hovering oft
the dark water,
still.
and the thin clouds
spread o’er the ground
cloaking all life,
beginning to
die.
but do not despair,
there’s life underneath.
at least until
the cold seeps in,
a covenant to all things
dark.
what was once
supple, now brittle,
bitterly, cold.
hard blue eyes stare
without seeing,
dark lashes reflect
what’s inside.
the air chilled;
Still.


The author's comments:
I wrote this last year as I watched the last remnants of an Indian Summer give way to the icy grasp of winter. It of course has a deeper meaning, actually many different meanings, so look into it and imagine. This poem is much more creative and insightful that it might seem upon first glance, so read into it and enjoy. :)

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Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 14 2011 at 10:23 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I rated it again lol! that's how much I like it!

And you're so welcome :) ! I'm glad I do, I try! :)


on May. 14 2011 at 4:27 pm
OriginalCarbonation GOLD, Naperville, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream as if you'll live forever
live as if you'll die tomorrow

thank you! im glad you see the deeper meanings to it :)

Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 14 2011 at 11:53 am
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I read it twice, it has more than one meaning, it's very deep and creative. Short but very well written! Good job!