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Relay Of Life

January 23, 2011
By lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
40 articles 5 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends


Life is no more than a continuous relay
Taken for granted as we recklessly play

A baby is born
New life we adorn

Wriggling and screaming with joy
Does not matter if it is a girl or boy

An elder dies
Who will hear our cries

With no one on whom to rely
We shrivel up and die

Miracles have lost their shine
Predetermined by another’s design

The only real question is time
When we go and who we leave behind

Same people different faces
Set in different times and places

Replaced by blinded bodies whirling about
Remaining never will we die out

Perpetually spinning round within
The never ending circle of life therein


The author's comments:
This is about the course of life and how as one person is taken out of this world another person is brought into the world to replace them.

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leafy said...
on Mar. 31 2011 at 7:47 pm
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

this poem is pretty good, and i also especially like the last few stanzas. the only thing is that in a couple places the flow is a bit off, but i still think this poem is pretty good

on Mar. 22 2011 at 3:47 pm
Dreamer_2012 BRONZE, Mountain Home, Arkansas
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dreams worth living for are dreams worth fighting for.

I really like this one =). I really like the phrase that is fourth from the bottom about time. =)

on Mar. 14 2011 at 7:39 am
Flyleaf_Rules SILVER, Bridgeport, Connecticut
9 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
My love for you is like a fake rose.

Loved the whole thing ^_^

especially the ending <3


Camii GOLD said...
on Mar. 13 2011 at 1:13 pm
Camii GOLD, Miami, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 75 comments

i really liked it! it's good! i liked the structure of the rhymes.

 


on Feb. 21 2011 at 6:32 pm
Made me think of The Bard' ...I'm terribly sorry for that...

on Feb. 21 2011 at 6:31 pm

I certainly enjoyed this poem. At first, I thought of Shakespeare's famous speech in As You Like It, the one that begins, "All the world's a stage, all the men and women merely players."

Considering this made of The Bard himself, simply bravo. I'm looking forward to seeing more excellence from you.


on Feb. 15 2011 at 6:15 pm
anisanasir_11 PLATINUM, Orlando, Other
23 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. -Edgar Allan Poe
~"Paper is more patient than people,"~Anne Frank
"Inspiration from the heart is written in the dark."~Anisa Nasir

Absolutely Amazing! 

Loved it!

I completely understand how this poem was extracted. I realli love it


on Feb. 11 2011 at 9:03 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 457 comments
Wow, I really like it. I especially like the last few lines. Very good.