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Crush

February 14, 2011
By RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman


Now and again when I sit with my friends
They always ask me who I like
And when I don’t answer
They tease and say that
“It’s probably Bradley Smith
The captain of the foot ball team”
But there wrong.
I once had a crush
And I can still remember her

We never talked when ever I saw her
I was in middle school and she was in high school
The only reason we meet was because
We both had to pick up a younger sibling

So everyday around three we would wait in the gym
Me with my friend and her by herself
She never stood by us though
As if she was better or didn’t want to be bothered
By our childish antics
And preferred to text or play a game on her phone
Like we weren’t there

My friends didn’t notice that I wouldn’t listen to them when they talked
I was to busy staring across the room
Getting a glimpse of her face when she looked up and her hair would move
Ever so gently across her face
My heart fluttered every time

One day she caught me staring
I silently panicked when our eyes met
But she just smiled at me
Before going back to her phone
My heart exploded at this point
And I could only stand there
With my mouth a gape

Then there were the times when she came
And anyone could tell she was having one of those days
A steady glare as she marched in
Mumbling something to herself
Every time I wanted to talk to her
To ask what was wrong to see if
I could be that one person who
She could talk to

But I never got the guts

Besides her mumbling I had never heard her voice
And it was killing me
Was it soft and smooth like syrup
Or hard and demanding
But I couldn’t talk to her
Not with my friends around
They would ask questions

Finally the day came when I was there by myself
And I was going to do it I really was
Or that’s what I told myself
But I didn’t

So when my sister came
I went to leave, dejected
When something tapped me on the shoulder
Turning around it was her
“You dropped your book.” She said
A small smirked graced her face
As if she was trying to smile but couldn’t

“Thanks.” I said carefully grasping it
Our hands lightly touching under neither
She didn’t seem fazed by it though
Then she just turned and walked away

To this day I still don’t know her name
But she was my first crush
And will always have a special place
In my heart


The author's comments:
Yeah... so this is a spur of the moment type thing. Rate and review. Pretty pretty please with a cherry on top.

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on Nov. 16 2011 at 12:10 pm
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thank you. That makes me feel a light and fluffy inside.

on Nov. 14 2011 at 1:32 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 185 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Dude, this is awesome.  Nuff said.

on Nov. 14 2011 at 12:01 pm
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

My fifth story to get one hundred veiws. I would like to thank everyone who comments and those who read far enough to see this comment.

on Nov. 14 2011 at 11:50 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thanks. I wasn't sure if I made the wrong chose because everyone kept saying that it probably would of been better in a story form, but I love doing story poems, and I think this worked out a bit better than the second one.

on Nov. 13 2011 at 1:06 pm
Jappyalldayeveryday, Detroit, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
They say that good things take time, but really great things happen in the blink of an eye

I read the short story version first, and honestly I think this version is way better. It's amazing :)

on Oct. 12 2011 at 7:26 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thank you.

on Oct. 11 2011 at 8:42 pm
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
— A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)
"writing is a struggle against silence" carlos fuentos
You miss 100% of the shots you don't take."

The idea was good, but I agree with Stargirl- I think it would be better as a short story or narrative or something, because as a free verse poem, it just doesnt... feel right? does that make sense? but they word choice was great :)

on Oct. 3 2011 at 11:49 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thank you.  I worked really hard on this trying to convey the right kinds of emtions and I'm glad to see it paid off.

 


Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Oct. 2 2011 at 4:03 am
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

Loved this! It's so descriptive and full of raw emotion... 5 stars!

ImErica BRONZE said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 2:28 pm
ImErica BRONZE, East Haddam, Connecticut
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but it says she likes a girl

on Sep. 30 2011 at 9:48 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

It's from a girls point of view

 


on Sep. 30 2011 at 9:47 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thank you, and yeah I was at a cross road of weath or not it was going to be a storie or a poem, and I went with poem in the end. But there were some parts that I though were more of a storie that a poem

 

 


on Sep. 29 2011 at 8:03 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This was quite good, though it just doesn't seem like a poem to me. I don't know why, I personally think that poetry has to do with imagery and emotion, not necessarily rhyme. This one seemed to have plenty of the first two. 

on Sep. 29 2011 at 11:49 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thank you. And I will:):)

 


on Sep. 29 2011 at 11:48 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Thank you, and it's from a girls poin of view.

 


LaceeJade GOLD said...
on Sep. 28 2011 at 11:20 pm
LaceeJade GOLD, Bucyrus, Ohio
17 articles 4 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
♥ I've made mistakes in my life. i've let people take advantage of me, and i accepted way less than i deserve. But, i've learned from my bad choices, and even though there are some things i can never get back and people who will never be sorry. i'll know better next time and i wont settle for anything less than i deserve. ♥

Awe, this is good:)

but, i was confused also.

is it in a boy or girl point of veiw?

:)


ImErica BRONZE said...
on Sep. 28 2011 at 5:20 pm
ImErica BRONZE, East Haddam, Connecticut
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 i like it!i do have the same question as calliashi though

on Sep. 28 2011 at 9:46 am
Calliashi SILVER, Litchfield Park, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
The man with the key is king and honey, you should see me in a crown. ~James Moriarty

I'm not a big fan of free verse poetry, I gotta be honest. But this one wasn't half bad! I was kind of confused (at the beginning with "bradley smith" I'm guessing it's a boy and then the girl . . . was she ga.y or something?) But this was pretty good--keep writing!