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My RainBow

April 25, 2011
By vampier BRONZE, Glasgow, Kentucky
vampier BRONZE, Glasgow, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"my favorite thang about eating gumybares is knowing that thay wont fight you back when you bite there heads off.......!!!!!"


My Rainbow is unseen from were you stand....!
My Rainbow you can Not bare were you stand....!
My Rainbow is Not of (LOVE) Not of (HAPPYNESS...Not of (HOPE)But of ((GOD))....!
My Rainbow is Not an (LIE)...!
My Rainbow is can show you the (TRUTH)....!
My Rainbow can show you my (LIFE)....!
My Rainbow will hit you with the (TRUTH)....!

NOW THAT MY POEM IS COMPLETE IT IS TIME 4 YOU 2 G0 HOME LOL



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AriShine GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2012 at 1:25 pm
AriShine GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"Whatever you are, be a good one." -Abraham Lincoln

This... well, I don't see this as very poetic, but it is unique. Happiness is spelled with an "i", and your screen name, "vampier", is mispelled as well, but I don't know if that was intentional or not. I have to say that the last part was completely unprofessional, "Now that my poem is complete it is time 4 you 2 go home lol". I kind of liked this interesting use of parantheses, but I see this poem as an amateurish and almost nonsensical collection of phrases. Please don't take my comment the wrong way; I don't mean to be mean, but this piece could use some work.