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May 30, 2011
By DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
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DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

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The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

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I puff up my bare chest
and flex my naked abdomen
as my pupil darts across
a mirror
so that when I see myself
I might pretend
the lines and depressions are regular
and that I am whole.

© Elise S., Clarksville, MD

The author's comments:
The inspiration for this piece came in the fitting room of a clothing store, and I quickly tped out the draft on my phone's notepad.
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ohheyyyelli SILVER said...
on Aug. 15 2011 at 9:22 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
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Short yet deep. (:
DeusExMachina SILVER said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:21 am
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

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Thanks!   
leafy said...
on Jul. 28 2011 at 8:02 pm
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short, but sweet, like the poem that got you 2nd place in my contest lol. keep up the nice work! 5/5
DeusExMachina SILVER said...
on Jul. 23 2011 at 9:38 pm
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The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

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Thank you to both of you!
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Deep and truly amazing.
Kai17 GOLD said...
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Short and powerful. I like it!
DeusExMachina SILVER said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 10:00 pm
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Thank you!! That seriously means so much! :)
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I thought this was just going to be a short poem, but you pack so much meaning into your poems!