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Heart Break

June 20, 2011
By musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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I look down at
the paper
holding the pen
in one hand
wiping my nose with
the other
splash
I look around confused
and see the tear
stains fall fast on
the paper
I smell something
it's his cologne
I taste saltwater
from my tears
I wipe my eyes
and see your
face
a whimper escapes
my mouth
the room starts
to spin
I hear his voice
thud
my head hits
the desk
I've fainted
crack
It's 12:30 a.m.
and my heart is
broken

© Kim B., Marblehead, MA

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musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 2:19 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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funny thing is this has never happened to me but it mans i have a brilliant imagination thanks :P
Ha-5-rika SILVER said...
on Aug. 6 2011 at 10:53 am
Ha-5-rika SILVER, Visakapatnam, Other
9 articles 7 photos 62 comments

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Life is what your thoughts make it.<br /> Happiness, success and the greatest of achievements are nothing if you don&#039;t have someone to share it with. <br /> A life lived for others is a life worthwhile - Albert Einstein.

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It is full of emotion and it is wonderful. 5 strs. I love it.
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 2:50 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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that means i have a great imaginaton huh? thanks glad u like my work
TheSilverLaurel GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 12:20 pm
TheSilverLaurel GOLD, Goole, Other
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This is great. it's descriptive, it's emotional, and it's just amazing! 5 stars!
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:10 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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i know i must have a fantastic imagination haha
CallMeMrs.Batman SILVER said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:05 pm
CallMeMrs.Batman SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
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&quot;It takes a great deal of courage to stand up to our enemies, but a great deal more to stand up to our friends.&quot;<br /> -Professor Dumbledore to Harry Potter<br /> &quot;What doesn&#039;t kill you, makes you stronger.&quot;<br /> -Unknown

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I like this alot. from what I read on here and what Im told from other people you described it perfectly.
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 1:03 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks that must mean i have a good imagination haha:P
sakina GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 12:37 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
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A negative thinker See&#039;s a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u&#039;ll surely B successful in LIFE.<br /> -Hazrat Ali (A.S)

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I really liked this poem...And u've discribed heartbreak absolutely correct...
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:12 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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that's good
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:10 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by.&quot; --Douglas Adams<br /> <br /> &quot;The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane.&quot; --Marcus Aurelius

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Don't worry; it was only temporary. :)
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:08 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks and i'm sorry to hear that u know what it feels like :(
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:05 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by.&quot; --Douglas Adams<br /> <br /> &quot;The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane.&quot; --Marcus Aurelius

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Well, you have a good imagination then!  This is exactly what heartbreak feels like, believe me.
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:04 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks isn't it funny how i wrote this but i've never had my heart broken maybe a hairline crack but nothing like this
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:03 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by.&quot; --Douglas Adams<br /> <br /> &quot;The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane.&quot; --Marcus Aurelius

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This perfectly describes heartbreak.  I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes either, so good job!
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 8:18 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks much appreciated
Leena7395 SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 6:48 pm
Leena7395 SILVER, Spring Grove, Illinois
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Be who you are because those who matter don&#039;t mind, and those who mind don&#039;t matter.

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of course! i'd love to :)
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 2:17 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thank u could u look at some of my other stuff
Leena7395 SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 10:23 am
Leena7395 SILVER, Spring Grove, Illinois
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Be who you are because those who matter don&#039;t mind, and those who mind don&#039;t matter.

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I really like this poem! especially how the sound words are in there spiratically. great job!
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2011 at 7:21 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thank you very much :P
FrownMonaLisa SILVER said...
on Jul. 6 2011 at 10:06 am
FrownMonaLisa SILVER, Arlington, Texas
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Don&#039;t cry because it&#039;s over. Smile because it happened

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Great poem. In this one breaking up the words so much is actually a great idea. It helps the reader understand how broken the person is.