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August 6, 2011
By Tiwaz SILVER, Jackson, Missouri
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Well we went way back into our heads and we saw all our old

empires and effigies airing out

in ruins amongst canary-headed ballerinas,

brittle bones popping,

crackling as they roasted.

The fat sizzled.

Cradled in the flames we found

antique ribbons long forgotten.

We discovered desires,

dumb dreams of dreary days and

fears we didn’t know we were

supposed to have.

We understood love and lilies and

how to play the oboe.

We knew; we rejected our prejudice, our weakness.

We were inventors

scientists

lovers

poets.

We were fortune-tellers

we were

God

Goddess

Devil and

Creator.

We forgot it all

before our heads left the pillow.

© Tabitha B., Galesburg, IL

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Kiki_McGee GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2012 at 3:36 pm
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
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"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

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I enjoyed it. I think that my favorite part was about the canary over the fire! My only advice would be to add commas when listing off things and to perhaps exchange "dumb" for a better word (it threw me for a loop). Other than that, great job!
these-roses GOLD said...
on Jun. 5 2012 at 8:09 pm
these-roses GOLD, Bristol, Indiana
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wow there is more than what is just on the page, the meaning can run deep if  you read it correctly. i really love this!
Tiwaz SILVER said...
on Mar. 24 2012 at 11:45 am
Tiwaz SILVER, Jackson, Missouri
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Thanks for the critique! And yes, that's basically what it's about (it could be about dreams or pre-dreams, it doesn't really matter).
thetruthawaits94 SILVER said...
on Mar. 23 2012 at 12:34 am
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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What exactly is this about? can you explain it in short to me? When I am reading I'm getting that it's the thoughts we think right before we sleep. When you're daydreaming right before you dream for real. I could be totally wrong. I hope I don't embaress myself! As for the poem, I love your word choice, especially at the beginning. I think that you should take out the word "well" on the very first line and just start it off with "we". I really love how this poem isn't so straightforward and it takes time to understand (which to you it might be perfectly clear, but to the reader not as much). You did a great job on this!
Tiwaz SILVER said...
on Mar. 19 2012 at 8:58 pm
Tiwaz SILVER, Jackson, Missouri
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Well, thanks a buttload to both of you. :) It means a lot. 
Belluna45 PLATINUM said...
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this is a really awesome i love the idea! it is so amazing! 
EPluribusUnum DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 18 2012 at 12:07 pm
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Heck yeah! This NEEDS to be in the mag.
dreamshaker said...
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I am speechless.

This was so beautiful, I can't even express how powerful it really was. The last lines especially were absolute perfection.

I can't believe this isn't published in the magazine. It's freaking amazing.

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oboes rock!! great poem by the way!
Eqrider SILVER said...
on Aug. 14 2011 at 4:24 pm
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I loved this! I had to read it twice actually but it has such an edgy, creative style to it! The last two lines pull it together beautifully! Check out my work if you get a chance.
savetheplanet PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 13 2011 at 9:01 pm
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Wow, such beautiful imagery.  I loved it. :D