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The Five Senses

September 10, 2011
By TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

If you’re seeing,
but not putting the pieces together.
If you’re hearing,
but you’ve never really listened.
If you’re picking up a scent,
but not the right one.
If you’re tasting,
but everything’s sour.
If you’re touching,
but never truly feeling.
are you seeing the beauty in life?
The symphony of music?
The scent of a rose?
The sweetness of chocolate?
The gentleness of a baby’s skin?
are you really living?
are you really living?

The author's comments:
I'm not sure if this one is really finished. If you can make any critiques it would help a lot!

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This article has 5 comments.

on Dec. 17 2011 at 8:35 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Wow.  You ask for critiques, but I really have none.  My only criticism is that the question at the end doesn't need to be repeated.  Once would be enough to make it resonate with the reader.  Other than that, this is beautiful!  I love the message behind this as well as the gorgeous imagery your descriptive words give off.  Keep writing!

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:22 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

That is such a good point to point out, you wrote this perfectly

*Abby* said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 5:27 pm
This is amazing! Such an awesome poem! KEEP WRITING its great!!!

on Sep. 29 2011 at 9:04 pm
Great Job!! I love your poems so much!! Keep Writing!!

teresa.w said...
on Sep. 27 2011 at 8:09 pm
nice poem!!!