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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Nov. 1 at 3:30 pm
Self-Scarred BRONZE, Temecula, California
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I love is so much!

on Oct. 26 at 4:52 pm
MrAbyss PLATINUM, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
“Normality is a paved road, but no flowers grow on it.” -Vincent Van Gogh

Still popping up on this website. The author of this must be doing well now.

on Feb. 11 at 10:43 pm
EmptyBox SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Really nice poem. Also a poem that actually rhymes instead of a massive, structureless paragraph filled with mundane thoughts formatted in the style of a poem.

on Nov. 2 2022 at 10:21 pm
AngelsImagination GOLD, Leicester, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Eleanor Roosevelt - "Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That's why we call it 'The Present'"

Emily Dickinson - "Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all."

I am inspired by this beautifully written poem. So much feelings/emotions was incorporated; making the words flow. I love the idea of the chain which symbolizes the protection of a father, and at the same time could also symbolize the limits of the child because of his/her fathers grasp. It could be interpreted in many ways which is interesting. This poem though was just in all, a masterpiece.

on Oct. 5 2022 at 10:49 am
glovermaddi GOLD, Apo, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Destruction is a form of creation.”

DAAAAAAMN

on Sep. 21 2022 at 11:52 am
Snake_Skullz SILVER, Pella Ia, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Not in doing what you like, but liking what you do is the secret of happiness" - J.M Barrie

Since 2008?? This is an amazing poem!

on Jun. 30 2022 at 7:11 pm
Ashila21 BRONZE, Chesterfield, Missouri
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This is a really interesting poem and could be interpreted in different ways. The last line sent shivers down my spine, and as a metaphor, a chain is a perfect way to describe the relationship of parent to child.

on Mar. 10 2022 at 11:00 am
poetofthedeepbluesea GOLD, Nashville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"One day you will tell the story of how you've overcome what you're going through now and it will become a part of someone else's survival guide."
- Unknown

You must have a true talent for this poem to remain relevant for 14 years.

on Mar. 10 2022 at 10:59 am
poetofthedeepbluesea GOLD, Nashville, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"One day you will tell the story of how you've overcome what you're going through now and it will become a part of someone else's survival guide."
- Unknown

I keep coming back to this poem. I can't count how many times I've read it. This is a true work of art, something every writer wants to produce.

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on Jan. 28 2022 at 10:08 am
elfmaster, Clio, Michigan
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so sad and caring

on Jan. 27 2022 at 12:37 am
aalaazah1 PLATINUM, Colombo, Other
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Favorite Quote:
where words fail music speaks
success is a journey, not a destination

when you feel your best, everybody else can feel it too - ARIANA GRANDE

If you are able to look yourself
in the mirror every day
with the decisions that you make,
that's where power starts - SELENA GOMEZ

Before you judge people judge yourself - ZAYN MALIK

haters will say what they want, but their hate will
never stop you from chasing your dream- JUSTIN BIEBER

If you follow your dreams,
it means you follow your heart.
if you do follow your heart,
I don't think you can go wrong- CELINE DION

It was amazing....

on Dec. 14 2021 at 9:32 am
GoPanthers1234, Davidson, North Carolina
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I liked the use of figurative language and how the dad made sure that his son couldn't drown.

JulianHoops said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 11:12 pm
JulianHoops, Harrisburg, North Carolina
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I enjoy the fact that the father is trying to protect his son from drowning. On the other hand, I was hoping that the dad would allow his son to go deeper in water.

AP2207 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:45 pm
AP2207, Moorsville, North Carolina
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I like the figurative language this poem uses and how it is described. I also liked how you used symbolism through out it.

Brady123456 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.

Brady123456 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:37 pm
Brady123456, Concord, North Carolina
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I like the way that the dad is shown to always protect his son. If the son failed at a new activity the chain would make sure they were safe. The chain sort of symbolizes the reach that a father has over their son and how they always want to protect their kids.

sbrooks123 said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 2:36 pm
sbrooks123, Cornelius, North Carolina
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I like how personification was used in this poem.

LiamLingor said...
on Dec. 13 2021 at 1:50 pm
LiamLingor, Huntersville, North Carolina
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I like how this poem uses symbolization to show how a dad protects a kid. They let the kid try to do things and in the event, they would've failed, the father has a chain that makes sure they are safe.

on Dec. 2 2021 at 12:50 pm
smaddie24 PLATINUM, Cityland, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
“Light shines brightest in the deepest dark!”
-Jim Butcher

lol, this is still top discussed 13 years later.

on Nov. 18 2021 at 11:46 pm
McLaughlin_It SILVER, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
All my life they let me know
How far I would not go
But inside the beast still grows
Waiting, chewing through the ropes
Who are you to change this world?
Silly boy
No one needs to hear your words
Let it go
Carnivore, carnivore
Won't you come digest me?
Take away everything I am
Bring it to an end

Can somebody explain, i'm confused