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The Ocean And Its Treasure

February 24, 2012
By Sharkgirl SILVER, Honolulu, Hawaii
Sharkgirl SILVER, Honolulu, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
Brave men may not live forever, but cautious men do not live at all.<br /> Author Unknown


I reach the sand to watch the sunrise-
With the gentlest shades of purple, pink, orange,
and with the sun spreading out its arms
to cover the land.
The breeze kisses my cheeks.
The waves brush my feet,
whisking all my worries out to sea.
My body becomes one with the ocean.
My breathing starts to slow and is in sync
with the waves as the softly lick the shore.
I can feel the heartbeat of all the life surrounding me
from the smallest clam buried under the sand
to the seagulls flying high above.
This soon becomes too much to bear
when I felt what they felt

and experienced what they experienced.
I felt like I was one with them
I knew their memories
and what their purpose was.
I can’t help but wonder if this is what the world
was meant to be with everyone doing their part.
I wonder if I belong here with them or somewhere else.

The author's comments:
This was the first piece I wrote hope you like it

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on Apr. 16 2012 at 4:35 pm
Sharkgirl SILVER, Honolulu, Hawaii
9 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Brave men may not live forever, but cautious men do not live at all.<br /> Author Unknown

Thanks im so glad you guys like it

on Mar. 6 2012 at 11:31 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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Great word usage(I suppose that is what it's called)!I felt the ocean!Favorate line- "The breeze kisses my cheeks" and "with the waves as they softly lick the shore(I think you meant to write a "y" there)". They're just awesome sentence majic. My favorate stanza is the last one. The last sentence of it had left me wondering too.

(sorry if this may be a duplicate. It froze on me while posting)


on Mar. 6 2012 at 11:30 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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Great word usage(I suppose that is what it's called)!I felt the ocean!Favorate line- "The breeze kisses my cheeks" and "with the waves as they softly lick the shore(I think you meant to write a "y" there)". They're just awesome sentence majic. My favorate stanza is the last one. The last sentence of it had left me wondering too.

on Mar. 6 2012 at 10:33 pm
AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It&#039;s a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where.&quot;<br /> -James Clavell, &quot;Shogun&quot;

I really like this and can relate well with it. I go hiking a lot in the mountains, and I really feel at home in nature. Well done.

on Mar. 6 2012 at 7:34 pm
bearsfan654 SILVER, Elmhurst, Illinois
7 articles 8 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Feb 20, 1962, The USA launches John Glenn into Earth orbit. Something America could do fifty years ago.... but not today.&quot; - Neil deGrasse Tyson

It's very descriptive! I love it!

Can you read mine:

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