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Fatefall

March 1, 2013
By Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

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&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Fate can change us-
Or do we change fate?
Can an already decided map
Be re-charted?

We are tumbling stones
In an raging river,
The water chooses the way.
We run from time-
But can time be changed?

Fate can tear us apart-
Or keep us together.
We given choices
And freewill.

Destiny awaits?
Or do we await destiny?
The future is what we seek
But the past is where we linger.

We fall in black,
Until a spark wakes us up.
Falling,
Falling.

Does fate lead to our end?
Or to our beginning?

© Laycie C., Stockton, CA

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Inspired by the way people think and dwell on the future and past.
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Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:23 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

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&quot; a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness&quot;

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i am now jealous of how creative and amazing you are keep at it
Alex_Writer GOLD said...
on Mar. 21 2013 at 9:42 am
Alex_Writer GOLD, West Palm Beach, Florida
18 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;In the long run, we shape our lives, and we shape ourselves. The process never ends until we die. And the choices we make are ultimately our own responsibility.&quot; ~Eleanor Roosevelt

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Why are you sooo good? This was such a different style but perfectly written. 
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 7:37 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Thank u all so much :) and omg I LOVE Divergent! Cant wait 4 the 3rd book :D
Mckay ELITE said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 5:03 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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&quot;The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do.&quot;<br /> &mdash;Apple&rsquo;s &ldquo;Think Different&rdquo; commercial, 1997<br /> &ldquo;Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn&#039;t understood.&rdquo; <br /> ― Weihui Zhou

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OMG. I'm almost done reading Divergent. And after reading this, it reminded of the novel. About the inevitable future and inescapable past. 
Lonely_Despair said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 6:31 pm
wow.. this pieve really made me think about what you were truly saying. Truly a great job. This is an incredible piece.
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 6:17 pm
TheSkyOwesMeRain GOLD, Irvine, California
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Life isn&#039;t measured by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments which take your breath away.<br /> <br /> You are only as strong as your weakest link.

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I love it, especially the ending question! It is great that you use imagery and descriptive language to explore a question that we have been asking for a long time. Awesome job!
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 6:08 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them.&quot;<br /> Henry David Thoreau<br /> <br /> &quot;I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once.&quot;<br /> John Green

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Aw thx so much :)
Armyj13 SILVER said...
on Mar. 19 2013 at 6:01 pm
Armyj13 SILVER, Traskwood, Arkansas
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The only easy day; was yesterday.

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I thought this was a good poem. I believe that you have a real talent. Also to answer the question I believe destiny will find those of who are ready waiting. We shall never find destiny itself. :)  
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on Mar. 18 2013 at 7:58 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
1 article 0 photos 274 comments

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Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

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i do dwell in the past way toooo offten
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on Mar. 18 2013 at 7:55 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

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i want to cry do i wait for my destiny or my fate the world seems dark to me ....... i love this