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June 27, 2013
By meghaagarwal BRONZE, Los Altos, California
meghaagarwal BRONZE, Los Altos, California
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it's strange because i never liked the color
brown, but as i gaze into your eyes, i can't help but fall irrevocably
in love with the creamy, smooth, rich color
of mocha coffee, and i hesitate in
turning away
from you, because i don't know
if i can function completely without
the caffeine that is your eyes

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I love all the comparations and you have got a talent! Keep up the with your work :)

on Jun. 4 2014 at 2:07 pm
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Favorite Quote:
"You! Yes you reading this. You are beautiful, talented, amazing, and simply the best at being you. NEVER FORGET THAT!"

That last line is so moving... You are a really good writer!

on May. 30 2014 at 10:07 am
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Favorite Quote:
"I am finally colouring inside the lines I live between"

Pretty damn incredible!

HudaZav SILVER said...
on May. 20 2014 at 1:43 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

The last line is especially powerful and moving, good work!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Aug. 29 2013 at 5:36 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I'm hating this site right now. Until today after months, I finally saw that you had posted in my forum requesting feedback. So sorry that your post didn't appear at first. For this poem being your first piece, I must say that it's incredible. I love the concept of it. As a brown-eyed person, I couldn't agree anymore. I love how you detailed the eyes of this lover. You didn't just say yeah you got great eyes. You went into lyrical details showing why this person's eyes are magnificent. Congrats on the Editors' Choice. Obviously you're a talented writer. 

on Aug. 13 2013 at 9:38 pm
rachelmuschett GOLD, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"heaven's not a place that you go when you die. it's that feeling in time when you feel alive."

Really paints a picture! Love the poem and the way in which you described the eyes and its color in such a little bit amount of words! 4/5.

Avery_S said...
on Jul. 9 2013 at 6:44 pm
Beautiful poem! Completely warms my soul.

frnbanan56 said...
on Jul. 9 2013 at 6:33 pm
I love it so much! I hope you get a lot of stars and comments :)

hazeleyes8 said...
on Jul. 8 2013 at 4:31 pm
wow this is beautiful!

Maya said...
on Jul. 8 2013 at 4:02 pm
Beautiful poem! Xoxo

laurennnnn said...
on Jul. 8 2013 at 3:58 pm
this is amazing :')

on Jul. 7 2013 at 3:10 pm
Oh my gosh, this is so amazing. I want this painted on my bedroom wall. Good work.

Willowin said...
on Jul. 7 2013 at 5:40 am
Wow, that was beautiful!!

on Jul. 7 2013 at 5:26 am
ielderkin339 BRONZE, Park Ridge, Illinois
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Love this!

tumblrgal said...
on Jul. 7 2013 at 3:58 am
this is beautiful. 

on Jul. 7 2013 at 3:04 am
This poem is beautifully written. It's a simple pleasure that puts looking into the eyes of someone you like into words. Good job!

leah said...
on Jul. 7 2013 at 2:51 am
i really think this is beautiful x

hula said...
on Jul. 6 2013 at 6:31 pm
you are the best<3 ily

nooo00oo0o0o said...
on Jul. 6 2013 at 3:42 pm
<3 <3 love this so much, its fantastic. 

on Jul. 6 2013 at 3:27 pm
Love this. Great poem and author! Great Job!