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Emotion

July 7, 2013
By maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc


I want to love
Want to feal
But it seems to me
Nothing is real

I feel locked up
So far away
From reality
And yet I feel it breathing
Right next to me

So many things wrong
I just want to know
If I can be fixed
Or does something else have to go

My emotions are gone
Everything so simple
I feel left out
I continue to dwell

What do I believe

Can you tell all of me is slipping away 
Or do you see me as her to stay

I and you are nothing 
We will die
And parish from this earth
What is the point of us
Of life

Are we just suppose to live
We are always preparing for what's ahead
I can no longer live in the moment instead
I fell into a whole long ago 

What is the point to climb back out
If we do nothing In or out
But still my body takes over
And yells and screams
Shatter me all over

They pull me out of this deep dark whole
But I'm still empty
Nothing inside
So save me now
Please save me again.


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on Sep. 6 2013 at 10:11 pm
SSSplatters PLATINUM, Plainview, Minnesota
25 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What does not kill you makes you stronger!" or
"Your only limits are the ones you set on yourself" Love doesn't bring happiness, happiness can just happens to be found easier where there is love-- Sam

awestruck at someone that someone who writes so beautifully is felling alone ... poetry is salvation for me I hope reading your peoms makes you as happy as it does me :)

on Aug. 8 2013 at 8:08 pm
lastingbreath16 DIAMOND, Lake Alfred, Florida
54 articles 3 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
screw it all if life gives u lemons do what ever you feel the need to do with them.

well it is the truth 

on Jul. 25 2013 at 3:24 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

Thank you for commenting and rating. I apreciate the tip to i  will keep that in mind :)

Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 25 2013 at 3:18 pm
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
65 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened.
- Thomas Jefferson

this one is really good too, rated it 5 stars :) One tip i could give if you want is just to make the last couple lines very strong with extra good rythm so it leaves a mark. They are very important, even if the rest of the poem is amazing. 

on Jul. 25 2013 at 12:04 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

thank you black night!! ive never been told that  

on Jul. 24 2013 at 6:26 pm
lastingbreath16 DIAMOND, Lake Alfred, Florida
54 articles 3 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
screw it all if life gives u lemons do what ever you feel the need to do with them.

It is so good u r a wonderful writer!!!!!  

on Jul. 23 2013 at 5:45 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

thank you for the positive feedback :)

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 23 2013 at 3:23 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

i really like this! there is a distinctive rhythm to it. fiveee stars

on Jul. 22 2013 at 12:40 pm
maelstrom14 GOLD, Oak Habor, Washington
14 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
let me not to the marriage of true minds admit impediments...etc

Wow thank you, it means a lot. i will look at yours now :)

Philia said...
on Jul. 22 2013 at 10:48 am
It has got a essence of truthfulness and captures the feel of frustration. Seems like you have written it right from the heart. Good work! P.S. do check out my poems.