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Your Heart Was My Home Until You Handed Me an Eviction Notice MAG

November 15, 2008
By amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
9 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
maybe i know that you'll crave my secure arms someday, but i'll have come across someone who wasn't afraid. and that's why i can't let go.


I removed the layers of blankets from my aching bones
to excavate the secrets that were held together by saliva
in papier-mâché envelopes, only to chew on disappointments
and lie on shards of fragile stained glass that tampered with my flaws,
instead of putting me back together with multicolored duct tape
so gray was only found inside of my body.

I wrung the tears from your sweatshirt and decided it was time
to give it back to you, in exchange for my serpent heart

[barely beating,

barely breathing];
instead of curling inside your stomach and making you
nearly as ill as I had become, just by drinking venomous nectar
and digesting fireflies so a small portion of me would feel alive,
I climbed over your picket fence and let you recline my eyes
in another awkward position to the point where I only chain-smoked
the main exhibits of your aesthetic proportions and declined
every deficiency of the person you truly are,


i. blunt



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Hallow SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2009 at 9:16 pm
Hallow SILVER, Peru, Indiana
6 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Most people don't know how they're gonna feel from one moment to the next, but a dope fiend has a pretty good idea. They just look at the labels on the little bottles.

I like a lot of it, but parts of it seem too wordy. That's just a personal thing though. The imagery is astounding.

on Nov. 10 2009 at 8:34 pm
Chase Arent GOLD, Foster City, California
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wow

that is simply amazing

on Nov. 10 2009 at 7:14 pm
first offf i love your title, its really amazing & your a really good writer, so keep it up !

on Nov. 10 2009 at 7:11 pm
I saw the title and seriously went 'OUCH!' Loved the poem. Powerful and amazing.

on Nov. 10 2009 at 6:25 pm
Writedancelove&live GOLD, Redding, California
12 articles 2 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much."
"Karen: If you're from Africa why are you white? Gretchen: Omg Karen, you can't just ask people why they're white."

Wow first off, I LOVE the title. It really catches the readers attention. And second, amazing poem. So much detail and it felt so real. Awesome job, be proud!

on Nov. 10 2009 at 3:58 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

wow this waz amazing. It really reaches out, too.

AmberO SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2009 at 1:15 pm
AmberO SILVER, New Windsor, New York
7 articles 2 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never give up no matter what life throws at you.

I loved it. it was fun and had feeling

on Nov. 10 2009 at 1:07 pm
THAT WAS A GREAT PEOM AND IT SPEAKS THE TOTAL TRUTH

on Nov. 10 2009 at 12:44 pm
blumarine BRONZE, Fort Worth, Texas
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wow that's amazing! and the picture is well chosen, too. i like it very much ♥

Emmalee SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2009 at 11:00 am
Emmalee SILVER, Rayville, Louisiana
9 articles 14 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making other plans. - John Lennon

Your way with words is amazing. :)

on Nov. 10 2009 at 10:43 am
freedomfighter97 BRONZE, Lake Ann, Michigan
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the descriptive writing of the poem is absolutely intriguing; it appeals to the senses in eccentric ways. very vivid and the reader can picture everything in her mind. great job. :)

on Nov. 10 2009 at 9:33 am
lauren_b SILVER, Flower Mound, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love something set it free, if their meant to be with you, they'll come back"

Really great poem.

on Nov. 10 2009 at 2:48 am
crazyHchan SILVER, Nagoya, Other
7 articles 16 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be yourself, everyone else is taken... :)

wow! amazing poem! you have a way with words :)

on Nov. 1 2009 at 7:10 pm
Poet_in_Motion PLATINUM, Sharon, Massachusetts
24 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love one another." –George Harrison (his last words)

"and down they forgot as up they grew" –e.e. cummings

"The sea is just a wetter version of the sky..." –Regina Spektor

Lovely. Beautiful. The title is absolute, pure, unbridled GENIUS, as is the rest of the poem.

on Oct. 19 2009 at 10:38 pm
Naila Littell SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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I relate to this in so many ways. I feel masochistic reading this; it's like putting myself through it all over again. Absolutly Beautiful Writingg.

on Oct. 19 2009 at 10:36 pm
glass_of_sun SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
9 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am his Highness' dog at Kew;
Pray tell me, sir, whose dog are you?" -Alexander Pope

congratulations! great word choice and expression of your second subject through unique metaphors.

RLJoy DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 9:31 pm
RLJoy DIAMOND, Glen Rock, New Jersey
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this is an amazing poem! ur such an amzing writer no wonder u got published! Keep writing!

on Oct. 19 2009 at 7:06 pm
amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
9 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
maybe i know that you'll crave my secure arms someday, but i'll have come across someone who wasn't afraid. and that's why i can't let go.

Wow, thank you so much. Your feedback is really appreciated.

Cady said...
on Oct. 19 2009 at 5:41 pm
This reminds me of a story i had written where this girl was loosing her mind and she never really understood everyone around her. Its like opening a book when you can't even read. I loved it in other words. Great job. I loved the words you used that supported what you were trying to get through to your readers. Nice job.

on Oct. 19 2009 at 5:24 pm
Gabrielle SILVER, Galesburg, Illinois
8 articles 2 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be nobody but myself -- in a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you everybody else -- means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight, and never stop fighting." -E.E Cummings

Amazing. Best peice I've read in a long time.