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Your Heart Was My Home Until You Handed Me an Eviction Notice MAG

November 15, 2008
By amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
9 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
maybe i know that you'll crave my secure arms someday, but i'll have come across someone who wasn't afraid. and that's why i can't let go.

I removed the layers of blankets from my aching bones
to excavate the secrets that were held together by saliva
in papier-mâché envelopes, only to chew on disappointments
and lie on shards of fragile stained glass that tampered with my flaws,
instead of putting me back together with multicolored duct tape
so gray was only found inside of my body.

I wrung the tears from your sweatshirt and decided it was time
to give it back to you, in exchange for my serpent heart

[barely beating,

barely breathing];
instead of curling inside your stomach and making you
nearly as ill as I had become, just by drinking venomous nectar
and digesting fireflies so a small portion of me would feel alive,
I climbed over your picket fence and let you recline my eyes
in another awkward position to the point where I only chain-smoked
the main exhibits of your aesthetic proportions and declined
every deficiency of the person you truly are,

i. blunt

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on Jul. 10 2010 at 6:55 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
54 articles 2 photos 748 comments

Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

this was VERY good. (: keep writing!

noemi BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 5:59 pm
noemi BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
4 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Know manifest your destiny start with small things at first then work your way up, believe me it works I'm a millionaire" - Uncle Andy

I loved this writing, it was really touched me. it was like as if i was living through that as if i was there the person. It was really deep, but i loved it and you should never  stop writing!!!

on Jul. 10 2010 at 1:23 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

This was amazing, so vivid and well-worded, excellent job.  Keep writing!

Btw, anyone who sees this, will you check out and comment on my work?

on Jul. 10 2010 at 10:08 am
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
52 articles 0 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
-The Dead Tossed Waves.

ummm....I'm just wondering why you feel the need to be so cruel and unecessarily rude to others. I find it really shallow and pathetic of you. you can stop putting people down like you're so much better than everyone else. It's really quite embaressing for yourself. You can state your oppinion, but you don't have to go about it in a rude way. Just a thought.

on Jul. 10 2010 at 10:05 am
RobertoO PLATINUM, Barrington Hills, Illinois
31 articles 0 photos 14 comments
Loved the poem, don't ever stop writing, and pleas check out some of my work.

on Jun. 18 2010 at 3:29 pm
Giggles94 BRONZE, Grand Rapids, Michigan
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
A girl should be so lost in God, that if a guy wants to be with her he must know God first.


on Jun. 18 2010 at 12:45 pm
Eternally17 SILVER, Dubai, Other
5 articles 7 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There exists no heaven and no hell, nothing to look forward to after we have gone to ashes; live every moment NOW, and make things happen the way you want to in this lifetime; not the next."

I love the feeling of ambiguity you have incorporated in this as well as the deep emotions it conveys. I also LOVE the comparison you have made with the heart and the serpent :)

Well done! ^.^

on Jun. 18 2010 at 10:38 am
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
7 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

That was so good ! Amazing writer ! Don't ever stop :)

Please come and check out my poems [comment or rate] Thank u ♥

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on Jun. 18 2010 at 12:16 am
babe892 GOLD, Suffern, New York
15 articles 6 photos 10 comments
I love this because it doesn't have a clear plot or story to tell, but it just gives a feeling. In reading this, I feel like I am with you under the blankets and there in the moment experiencing what you're describing, and feeling what you're feeling. I really enjoyed it.

on May. 30 2010 at 4:50 pm
xtellmelies BRONZE, Clark, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"i rather die standing , then live on my knees " -Emiliano Zapata

thats brutal :/

on May. 27 2010 at 4:40 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

WHAT? spelling--wrong

and you stated " i wish i can't explain how good this is"

don't you mean you wish you could???

try proof-reading

on May. 27 2010 at 4:38 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

the title was creative but let's get to the point.....

in the beginning you start with blankets------fine.

then you totally switch completly and start jumping all over the place.

where's the concept? the plot? the theme? to tell you the truth i was very....confused. try to stay in one place. it's almost like you are a painter and you are painting so many things on one canvas that the people viewing it...have no idea of what it's supposed to be. GIVE CLEAR IDEA OF WHAT'S HAPPENING. 

on May. 27 2010 at 4:31 pm
bbygurl21 PLATINUM, Boston, Massachusetts
29 articles 0 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
sticks n stones my brick my bones but words cant

i could relaeat to this a lot. it made me cry. i wish i cant explain how good this is

on May. 27 2010 at 3:19 pm
BeYOUtiful_13 BRONZE, Tinley Park, Illinois
4 articles 1 photo 98 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Imperfection is beauty, madness is genius and it's better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring.”
~Marilyn Monroe

OMG!! that is really heart felt. I wish I had that talent. Can you read The Last Day.... It's by me. Can you judge it 4 me??? thnx

on May. 27 2010 at 2:38 pm
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.

I love this poem. It's powerful, beautiful, vivid, and moving.  Five stars all the way! And by the way, would you mind checking out some of my stuff? I'd really appreciate it. And keep writing. :)

Fires SILVER said...
on May. 27 2010 at 1:48 pm
Fires SILVER, Eagle Pass, Texas
8 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Follow your heart always!


on May. 26 2010 at 7:01 pm
haventy0uheard PLATINUM, Kings Park, New York
28 articles 0 photos 186 comments
very creative:) i love the title!

on May. 5 2010 at 11:11 pm
marychristeta BRONZE, Mishawaka, Indiana
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The really important kind of freedom involves attention, and awareness, and discipline, and effort, and being able truly to care about other people and to sacrifice for them, over and over, in myriad, petty, little, unsexy ways every day." - David

his is very unique-- I really like your style! I love how the whole poem just doesn't stop until the end, I was constantly feeling the words and I was really affected by your bold and vivid language. Nice Job!!

on May. 5 2010 at 9:27 pm
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

wow so unique and so beautifully written! great, great job!!! i loved it :)

on May. 5 2010 at 7:46 pm
Jilybeanrb SILVER, Prentiss, Mississippi
6 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Margo was not a miracle. She was not an adventure. She was not a fine and precious thing. She was a girl." ~Paper Towns

This is incredible. Every word was touching and unique. It reminds me of an E. E. Cummings poem-- I want to read it over and over, just because it sounds so beautiful. I know that it means alot, too.