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Comatose MAG

November 19, 2008
By Anonymous

We’re hanging on a gossamer thread of lies and fairy-tale dreams.
You’re Alice in Wonderland; a cheshire in a tree
Set adrift in the sea of doubt
Laced with traces of the harsh reality
I’m a mouse in a maze of mind
e’re chasing the cheese
Spinner of fate, the web shorn
Bitter tears of regret; things realized too late
The mad queen paints blood on roses and tears up dreams
chasing a disillusioned reality
Trapped of own; wished free
Lost and alone
in my cave of mind
my cave of mind
one and my own

© Anonymous

The author's comments:
random thoughts and inspirational bits about people who are corrupted by others and unbeknownst to them, encourage the monsters inside to grow and claw at their minds. :3
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This article has 16 comments.

SLEEPY42 said...
on Jun. 28 2011 at 5:08 pm
YALL HAVE SUM VERY GUD POEMS
elflako003 said...
on Sep. 15 2010 at 9:29 pm
luv this poem.. is so good and understandable and true..
KirstynAlexandra PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 12:36 pm
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Really good poem, and so true! Plz check out my work, it will be highly appreciated :)
Meavescrete SILVER said...
on Jun. 19 2010 at 3:38 pm
Meavescrete SILVER, Potomac, Maryland
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This was realy good, u made the ramdom thoughts flow very well.
Meavescrete SILVER said...
on Jun. 19 2010 at 3:36 pm
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You are a Spammer.
closed-in said...
on Feb. 8 2010 at 12:36 pm
i like it keep on writing
Sachi-San said...
on Feb. 4 2010 at 7:23 pm
I also like the style you used. It is very different and flows well. ^^
Ms.Understood said...
on Jan. 16 2010 at 2:02 pm
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There's something so unique about the way this poem explains itself. I loved it. Please continue to write things like that.
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on Nov. 9 2009 at 2:47 pm
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This poem has great flow and insight.<br /> I really enjoyed it.<br /> Lovely poem darling =]<br /> -Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-<br /> XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx

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This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-

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poetry.is.wonderful said...
on Oct. 20 2009 at 8:04 pm
your words are well put, & the way you used your knowledge to prove your point is brilliant. you defiantly got talent, keep reaching im sure you'll be famous for your work

-nata
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on Aug. 26 2009 at 3:27 am
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This is brilliant. You're very talented with the poetry flow... Five stars!

What really got to me was the way the title contrasts with the content, and yet makes perfect sense. It's beautiful.

~S.E.M
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This is REALLY good. I get the whole image. Keep writing!
Hillary SILVER said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 9:29 pm
Hillary SILVER, Concord, California
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this is hella good!

check mine out?TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/126059/Evils-Playground/
KyleS. GOLD said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 8:12 pm
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That's also the name of the album.
lemons_r_crazy BRONZE said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 1:04 pm
lemons_r_crazy BRONZE, Holdenville, Oklahoma
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I loved this poem! The first line really pulled me in, it's very magical and all very true!
RadioShower PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 15 2009 at 10:40 pm
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Wow! Soooooooo Cool you have a way with words!

(There is a song called Comatose by SKILLET look um up if you want, there my favret band!)