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Wild Hair for a Wild, Wild Girl

September 19, 2014
By Carly_Elizabeth PLATINUM, Othello, Washington
Carly_Elizabeth PLATINUM, Othello, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"And above all, watch with glittering eyes the whole world around you because the greatest secrets are always hidden in the most unlikely places. Those who don't believe in magic will never find it."
Roald Dahl


Her eyes were fire.

But her breath was ice.

She smiled as she

ran all over the world.

Her wild spirit too

much to be contained

in her wild fire eyes

and perpetual smile.

Her hair was just as wild

as her spirit.

It danced as she laughed

and ignited a contagious fire

in the ones she loved.

But she had a wild fire spirit

and breath as cool as ice.

It was only right

that she was given wild hair

for a wild, wild girl.



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on Oct. 26 2014 at 2:48 pm
Carly_Elizabeth PLATINUM, Othello, Washington
39 articles 0 photos 131 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And above all, watch with glittering eyes the whole world around you because the greatest secrets are always hidden in the most unlikely places. Those who don't believe in magic will never find it."
Roald Dahl

Thank you so much for reading. And yeah I see what you mean. Maybe put "Her wild spirit was too much..." I think that'll make it sound better.

on Oct. 26 2014 at 7:02 am
Extraterrestrial SILVER, Singapore, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what I do. Hold tight and pretend it's a plan!"

Ohh, repetition! I love repetition. Great job on conveying such a marvelous sense of freedom in your poem. I got the image of dancing under the moonlight in an open meadow. This poem seems joyful but at the same time... kind of wistful too? It's hard to describe. I love it. Just a minor critique: "Her wild spirit too much to be contained in her wild fire eyes and perpetual smile." This seems like an incomplete sentence / sentence fragment. Other than that, great job -- the descriptions you used here are astounding.