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Knowing Nothing of This ’Til Then MAG

January 28, 2009
By Edye Pucciarelli SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
Edye Pucciarelli SILVER, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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I was younger then, but only by months.
Curiosity settled unbearably throughout my limbs
And I waited
Patiently for you to carry yourself down wooden stairs
Rightleftright – my ear against olive-colored carpet
To make sure that coast was clear
Hands resting on hinge of drawer and pulling
I reached inside, ransacked and shifted through its contents
And uncovered your thoughts in journal form (success)
I remembered then how embarrassment
Burnt my cheeks red
Everything you said when you found the
Monster I had hidden in the sheets beneath my bed
And I recalled your tears
The shape your body took, fetally curled
With your knees against your chest
You wept endlessly.
Fearing flood or revenge
I tossed and turned that night, grasping the fact
That I had failed you and again –
When I opened that leather cover and divulged
Your evenly spaced print to my eyes and that entry
I had watched you record on blue printed lines
Night prior, before dark, before saying
“Sharpen this, please!” in an angry tone
From across the hall and again –
With a clean-cut graphite tip you wrote
“October twenty-second …”
In the uppermost corner and proceeded with
“My Journal, I have never felt so alone …”



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on May. 21 2010 at 6:07 am
Do you tell the whole story on a canvas while painting? In the same way, so much detail is not needed. It just makes it confusing.

on May. 20 2010 at 11:09 pm
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

Wierdly enough.... as u said.... poetry is an art.... let her/him use the detail... it gives it more feeling... and makes the poem what it is!!! =)

on May. 20 2010 at 11:07 pm
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
32 articles 0 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

i like this... it's really pretty!!!! please keep writing!!! =)

on May. 20 2010 at 10:13 pm
amelia.adams246 BRONZE, North Richland Hills, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
In the end, a friend is someone that cares and doesn’t judge. A friend loves, laughs, and helps you through the hard times with hugs and smiles. A friend comforts with words or sometimes just an ear.

oh...okay...I get it now...THANKS! :)

on May. 20 2010 at 10:11 pm
SarahJumps SILVER, Richmond, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Great minds discuss ideas; average minds discuss events; small minds discuss people.
-Eleanor Roosevelt

I think, at a child's birth, if a mother could ask a fairy godmother to endow it with the most useful gift, that gift should be curiosity. -E.R

it's about a journal that was stolen and read. Beautiful job. I can relate well. 

on May. 20 2010 at 9:58 pm
amelia.adams246 BRONZE, North Richland Hills, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
In the end, a friend is someone that cares and doesn’t judge. A friend loves, laughs, and helps you through the hard times with hugs and smiles. A friend comforts with words or sometimes just an ear.

I really liked the poem...It was amazingly awesome, but I didn't understand what it was about...But it was a really well written poem and I enjoyed reading it!

on May. 20 2010 at 9:34 pm
I must say that this poem is very similar to one of my own works. I really enjoyed reading it. You need to b more vague and less detail. poetry doesn't need so much detail. It's an art.

on May. 20 2010 at 9:05 pm
angel2745 BRONZE, Sacramento, California
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Just because you don't understand it, it doesn't mean this doesn't make sense! I love this! I understood it at least, not confusing at all. Then again my brain works a little differently than mosts so that could be why :P   5*

Eilatan GOLD said...
on May. 20 2010 at 7:47 pm
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

i agree this poem is really deep

Smileyj789 said...
on May. 20 2010 at 7:46 pm
I really did love this peace: all the emotion and feeling you seem to have put in this. Its wonderful!! Keep up the great work!!

on May. 20 2010 at 6:54 pm
becausetheskyisblue SILVER, Arlington, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
So I know she forgives me, just as I forgive her. Thomas Edison's last words were: "It's very beautiful over there." I don't know where there is, but I believe it's somewhere, and I hope it's beautiful.
--John Green, Looking for Alaska

I don't understand why this is getting negative comments - I think it's beautiful :)

I also don't want to sound like a spammer, but could you maybe see my poem, Onwards?  I need some feedback on it.


on May. 20 2010 at 6:52 pm
lildutchgurl BRONZE, Hillsborough, California
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wow i liked this alot and i followed it! keep writing :)

on May. 20 2010 at 6:41 pm
olympian-queen, Charleston, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Yesterday is history. Tommorrow is a mystery. And today? Today is a gift that's why they call it the present.

somewhat confusing. clean it up a little and give it more of a central theme from the beginning

on May. 20 2010 at 5:50 pm
avidDreamwriter BRONZE, Ridgeville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Not all those who wander are lost"- J.R.R. Tolkein's Lord of The Rings

There's no sense as to why someone would rummage around that much just to find a journal. It seems a little more depressive than anything.

on May. 20 2010 at 5:30 pm
seven_stones GOLD, Atlantis, Massachusetts
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the feelingings r mutual Zack924....

 

tool


on May. 20 2010 at 5:29 pm
seven_stones GOLD, Atlantis, Massachusetts
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u go ripples!!!!!!!

on May. 20 2010 at 5:28 pm
seven_stones GOLD, Atlantis, Massachusetts
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hell to the yeah!!!!!

on May. 20 2010 at 5:24 pm
Emily1244772 SILVER, Tullahoma, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Writing isnt just a hobbie. It's a whole other world that only YOU can change. YOU make it what YOU want to and no one can change it but YOU."

i like it alot but idk what u r tlkin bout..

on May. 20 2010 at 3:47 pm
Its.beautiful. BRONZE, Goose Creek, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Immature love says: 'I love you because I need you.' Mature love says 'I need you because I love you." — Erich Fromm

This would be wonderful if I knew what you were talking about.

on May. 20 2010 at 12:32 pm
Valerie1234 GOLD, Whitmore Lake, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"It is better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all"

That was really good...Confused me a little bit, but it was good :)