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Brooklyn Bridge

March 21, 2012
By SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t punish yourself,&quot; she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing.&quot;<br /> --Markus Zusak, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;


I saw her daily
Staring down at the water
And one day, she jumped.


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Written and posted March 21, 2012: a hypothetical poem.

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NickyJ BRONZE said...
on Mar. 30 2012 at 4:08 pm
NickyJ BRONZE, Hyde Park, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;In three words I can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned about life: it goes on.&rdquo; ~Robert Frost

I agree with beautifulspirit. At first I thought it was a run-of-the-mill suicide poem, but I read it again and after some thought processing I recognize some layers here. I see a layer of guilt, a layer of depression, a layer of lonlieness, a layer of desperation, a layer of unknown.

It's ambiguous, but it really does carry a lot of weight. I think, although not about nature, this is a prime example of how significant a Haiku should be.

on Mar. 30 2012 at 3:25 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.<br /> --Eleanor Roosevelt

My first thought was that your poem was about suicide because people would jump off of the bridge. Or is this a reflection of the speaker's lack of reaching out to the girl? Is this guilt? This piece carries ambiguous meaning. 

on Mar. 29 2012 at 9:12 pm
Jokorium SILVER, Union Gap, Washington
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Though it is short and simple, this piece could definitely make one think.

It made me think of the people I see everyday, the ones who you just can't quite read. The ones that you have no idea what they're thinking.

It also made me think of things in life, such as running water, that are sometimes beautiful to look at, but could one day be our demise.