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It's Time Somebody Told Me

October 19, 2009
By MissLeaDee SILVER, Guttenberg, Iowa
MissLeaDee SILVER, Guttenberg, Iowa
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd been wondering all this time, whether there's any meaning to a failed love. Is it something that will disappear the same as something that never existed. Now I know, there is meaning..there was a meaning...right here." – Takemoto [Honey and Clover]

It's time somebody told me
that my fate is not my fault.
That I didn't cause the mayhem
that made me an adult.

I wish somebody told me
that the trees aren't always green.
Every sky is a different blue
not all is what it seems.

If somebody had told me
there would be scars upon my heart
I might have even listened
and caused myself no harm.
I would have tossed away the images
of cold, unliving skin.
I would have sacrificed my hidden pride
and maybe let you in.

It's time somebody told me
to rant and scream and shout.
To see with eyes wide open
and write my words out loud.

It's time somebody told me
how much I have to give.
That I'm good enough for life
and strong enough to live.

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This article has 14 comments.

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on Aug. 2 2013 at 12:56 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

this was so utterly perfect! the first two lines were captivating, and your rhyme scheme and story kept me reading tuntil the end. i just love this piece so so much.

on Apr. 20 2013 at 11:56 pm
WaffleOcean2934 PLATINUM, Rogers, Minnesota
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The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams-Eleanor Roosevelt

The words are so beautiful, and they strike good emotion into the reader really well.  Amazing!

on Dec. 24 2012 at 7:53 pm
IfLifeGivesYouLemons PLATINUM, Sacramento, California
37 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was 5 years old, my mother always told me that happiness was the key to life. When I went to school, they asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up. I wrote down 'happy'. They told me I didn't understand the assignment. I told them they didn't understand life

Well, the content is pretty good, but it's not a limerick. A limerick is 5 lines with a strict rhyming structure: The first, second, and fifth lines rhyme with each other, and the third and fourth lines rhyme with each other. It's not a bad poem, but it would be better placed somewhere else.

on Nov. 19 2012 at 7:02 am
kaleejoy BRONZE, Franklin Furnace, Ohio
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you don't like to read, you haven't found the right book. -J.K. Rowling

Mary stood there in the doorway for a while, looking out at the dripping world as if she found it beautiful. -Dorothy M. Johnson

This is breathtaking... Absolutely amazing. I think everyone needs to hear this sometimes.

Rachet BRONZE said...
on Oct. 11 2012 at 11:31 pm
Rachet BRONZE, Nampa, Other
3 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only limit to our realization of tomorrow
will be our doubts of today.

Franklin D. Roosevelt

WOW, this actaully made me tear up a little, very powerful and touching! LOVED IT!

InkWriter13 said...
on Jun. 14 2012 at 8:48 pm
Powerful message. Rings true most definitely in human nature. Lots of insight and great usage of phrases and ideas to convey this message. :D Great writing. Would you please read and comment on my poem titled "Onward and Upward"? Thx :D

on Apr. 18 2012 at 11:28 pm
logo1234 BRONZE, Scottsdale, Arizona
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I think it conveys a good direct message to the readers. Everything fits together very well. Very easy to understand and read.

on Feb. 12 2012 at 12:23 pm
xximjustmexx PLATINUM, Oak Forest, Illinois
46 articles 0 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
There's no god. There's no religion. There's only life, what you do with YOUR life, who YOU let affect YOUR life. Bad things happen to everyone, you just have to learn to deal with them.

okay... i never cry... ever... but this poem made me.. because i think it said everything that ive been feeling.. amazing job.. keep it up. 5/5

on Oct. 3 2011 at 6:11 pm
XxilybbyxX SILVER, Saginaw, Michigan
5 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes we build up walls, not to keep people out; but to see who cares enough to break them down.

You are so AMAZING!! you are a great writer! keep it up!! :)

on Aug. 20 2011 at 5:08 pm
Violingurl100 BRONZE, Grafton, Wisconsin
3 articles 0 photos 3 comments
i really loved this. honestly, i think this should go in the magazine. Keep it up!!!

on Feb. 25 2011 at 5:49 pm
leonajordan BRONZE, Fort Walton Beach, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never give up, when you're down, get up and try again.

This is THE BEST POEM I've EVER far...I'm young, so I'll problly reed more in my lifetime :) I hope yew publish MORE poemz 4 me 2 reed...Keep up the work!!!!

on Sep. 24 2010 at 10:51 pm
i really liked ur poem its AMAZING it has a smooth flow and a strong message. i find it cool how some people can express feelings thru poetry and u r one of those people :) keep writing

on Nov. 2 2009 at 6:58 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

wow....a breathtaking piece! the flow is amazing, and everything fit together perfectly. the content of the poem itself is pure PERFECTION and it's AMAZING :) for sure one of my favorite pieces. check out some of my work if you could, i would love your opinion. but i really LOVE this piece:) 5 stars!

Emaka GOLD said...
on Nov. 1 2009 at 10:24 pm
Emaka GOLD, West Medford, Massachusetts
17 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word is just a word until you give it meaning.

Unbelievable. I really wish I could write like that (: