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Crash (Goodbye)

September 26, 2009
By greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
12 articles 1 photo 50 comments

Why can't you just see,
That the difference is me?
That step you're so willing to take,
The last one might have come too late.
I see you, wish upon a star,
You don't know how lucky you are,
I'm looking for you near, searching far,
I look to the sky and see my star.

Why can't you just see,
All that you've ever wanted from me?
I wish I could say the same for you,
Same size, different shoe.
I'm not burning up, but I'm ready crash,
Extract my death wish from the ash,
You knew this could never last,
Speeding along, gone in a flash.

Why can't you just see?
The world is structured so rigidly.
No room: if it's bent,
It'll break, time well spent.
Hesitates, then falls in descent,
Irreparable; time well spent.
Time well spent living a lie.
Now all that's left to say (goodbye)

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This article has 10 comments.

mitguy said...
on May. 15 2012 at 10:41 am
I loved this sonnet. It was really deep. It had really good rhythm. I hope you make more poems.

on Feb. 17 2012 at 9:45 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

WOW!! i love this work! ps. would u and anyone else willing read, rate, comment on my poem Black Fire? please, it would meen a lot! thx in advance for coming possibility

EllieHeart said...
on Dec. 13 2011 at 5:46 pm
EllieHeart, Tempe, Arizona
0 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Pay no attention to what the critics say; no statue has ever been erected to a critic."

~Jean Sibelius

Really strong! Beautiful! Can you check out my poem Siren Lies? I'd really appreciate your feedback. Thanks!

Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 30 2011 at 8:32 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

Beautiful and incredibly powerful. If you have the time I would love to hear your opinion on my work.

on Oct. 30 2011 at 1:25 pm
Belluna45 PLATINUM, Shelbyville, Kentucky
31 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Look after my heart- I've left it with you."
-Stephenie Meyer (Eclipse (Twilight #3))
"Either write something worth reading or do something wor
th writing."
-Benjamin Franklin
"A dishonest man you can always trust to be dishonest."
-Johnny Depp

this is so amazing! kep writing!

on Mar. 17 2011 at 12:10 am
Wandering_Heart BRONZE, Saugerties, New York
3 articles 0 photos 1 comment
loved it! your a really great writer, and your poem had a really nice flow

on Jul. 30 2010 at 7:25 pm
MomoSaysRawrr BRONZE, Kankakee, Illinois
1 article 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"In the end, everyone's going to hurt you. You just have to find the ones worth suffering for."
-Bob Marely

"Don't narrate... Paint! Draw! Build! CREATE!" -Jack London

This was amazing. Keep writing!:)

on Jun. 19 2010 at 10:23 am
taintedannex GOLD, Hong Kong, Other
15 articles 5 photos 166 comments

Favorite Quote:
The truth is that at some point, everyone's going to hurt you. You just have to decide who's worth the pain.

Some say having something to lose is what makes you vulnerable. I believe that having something to lose only makes you stronger.


on Jan. 29 2010 at 5:22 pm
sketchette15 BRONZE, La Salle, Colorado
3 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
'As our circle of knowledge grows, so does the circumference of wonder around it.' - Albert Einstein

i like it, it gives you something to think about.

on Jan. 29 2010 at 7:51 am
APoetAtHeart GOLD, Lyman, Maine
13 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
" I am, Who I Am, But WHY I Am,Who I Am, Is What Confuses Me." - By Me

Amazing. Very powerful