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Undying Need

July 9, 2011
By Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."

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I have this undying need to sing out,
To tell the world something they need to know,
I may be loud and leap around and shout,
Because I know no other way to show:
My drive to fight for a place in your heart,
How much I need to see that lovely face,
Each exquisite feature a piece of art,
Each luminous eye, a glimpse of deep space,
Yet this beautiful creature I yearn for,
Belongs to someone who does not deserve,
The affection of the one I adore,
The ones whose trust I would always preserve,
Love is an act of blood in my system,
I am dying as its newest victim.

© Heather H., Phoenix, AZ

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Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 6:31 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

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"I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had."

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Thankkk you so much!
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 22 2011 at 11:22 am
SweetPolarBearHugs PLATINUM, New York, New York
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&quot;All conflict in literature is, in its simplest form, a struggle between good and evil.&quot; - unknown author.<br /> &quot;All that we see or seem<br /> Is but a dream within a dream.&quot; - Edgar Allan Poe

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Truely a beautiful and amazing poem:) I like it
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 9:29 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thank you so much!
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2011 at 9:29 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thankk you! :D
zone7294 GOLD said...
on Jul. 19 2011 at 8:52 pm
zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
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If im good for nothing, then your bad for everything

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this is a really awesome poem you should read some of my poems called remember me and addicted tell me what you think and rate it if you want
HannahT SILVER said...
on Jul. 19 2011 at 3:13 pm
HannahT SILVER, Medford, New Jersey
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Writing is a struggle against silence. ~Carlos Fuentes

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This is really a beautiful poem...I love it:D well done!
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 11:19 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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Thankk you soo much! :D

 

whitstar27 GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 10:57 pm
whitstar27 GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
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this poem is realluy powerful, especially the last line
autumn_meets_winter PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 10:02 pm
autumn_meets_winter PLATINUM, Houma, Louisiana
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Don't we all??
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 9:59 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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Thank you so much! I pride myself on details <3
autumn_meets_winter PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 9:56 pm
autumn_meets_winter PLATINUM, Houma, Louisiana
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I like this one too. Your flow between lines is beautiful. And your details, once again, are fine. Gorgeous, actually.
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 8:15 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thank you so much! I guess how I think of it is I have a VERY creative imagination and like things to take a weird turn(: Thanks for your nice comment!
Garnet77 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:58 pm
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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I love your poetry! How do you think of this stuff??? Like several people have said before me, your word choice is superb. And I love the rhymes. This is amazing. Keep writing! :)
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:42 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thank you! I also love the last lines as well<3
Thank you for the feedback as well! I can see how the and in the third line can make it choppy, thanks!
firenrain GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 7:34 pm
firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
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i really really enjoyed this poem. As people have said, your last two lines, spoke to me the most. The only thing I found that you could improve on is the structure and flow of the poem. I also found that when you used the word "and" a lot in the third line it didn't flow as well. But that could just be me :) Overall great job!
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 6:06 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thankk you!
NinjaGirl BRONZE said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 2:53 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
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Very good! Loved your word choice and the emotion you put into this. Nice job finding rhymes :)
Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 3:09 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
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&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thank you!
alex198 said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 1:38 pm
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I love it! Especially the last two lines. The whole poem is just filled with so much emotion. Well done :)

 

Delictious GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 12:06 pm
Delictious GOLD, Lubbock, Texas
16 articles 5 photos 151 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I would like to be remembered as a woman who did the best she could with the talent she had.&quot;

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Thank youu!