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Paul's Peach Trees

September 26, 2009
By Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should've behaved better. -Anne Lamott, from Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life.


I remember the days when Paul and were young, we had such fun together. We would swim in the cool creek just past the edge of the woods, the cool water caressing our backs after our days running around in the fields.
The fish would swim and tickle our toes. He would look at me and I back at him. When it got dark we ran home through the tall trees that were our shelters from the rain.
In the springtime the creek was lined with fresh trees and we would steal the peaches from them. We went through town and hopped the high fences rushing to get to the creek.
Our feet were covered with dirt and mud and on the days that it rained, we ran through the many fields that lined the town.
We were drenched and covered in the sweet earth but we didn't care.
We were too young to care. And when we got older he would get jealous when I talked to the other boys.
I didn't love him, he was best friend and like a brother, but I didn't love him.
He watched over me and took the blame when I did things wrong. I tripped many a times and when I hurt myself, he would pick me up and carry me back to my house.
We would chase each other down the creek and I would jump on his back and we both collapsed into the water.
I went down to the creek one day at the time Paul told me to be. I was sixteen and totally care free. He said he had something to tell me naturally I was nervous.
he knelt down on one knee and took my hands in his and asked me t marry him.
I looked at him and I just couldn't see myself married to him at sixteen years old. I told him and he ran back through the woods looking for me.
It was dark and i lost my way. I curled up and cryed,why had i said such things.
I walked home to find Paul, to apologize, he wasn't home so I went to look by the creek.
He wasn't there and no one had heard from him. Me and some of his friends went through the forest to look for him.
We found him. Hung by a rope from the top of a tree. I went numb and almost collapsed.
He took his knife and in the bark of the tree and put our initials and the words I always loved you.
I went down to the creek every once and a while. I thought about eating the peaches that come every spring, but it just didn't feel right about eating them without Paul with me eating one too.
Everyday I thought about him and I found that I made the wrong choice that day.
I had always loved him and I missed him. And in the bark were still our initials and under them I scrawled the words, with knife that was stabbed into the tree, I love you too.
I climbed up the tree and sat on the bracnh that he died on and I felt his presence with me.
It felt like old times, like he was still sitting right next to me. I left on the branch I balanced a single peach form Pauls peach trees.


The author's comments:
I love retelling stories and I had a dream about this so I am retelling it to you!!! hope you like.

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on Jan. 29 2012 at 4:38 pm
Cbsiegel BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
A woman whose smile is open and whose expression is glad has a kind of beauty no matter what she wears.
Anne Roiphe

Amazing. I totally saw the suicide coming

on May. 24 2010 at 3:49 pm
Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
65 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should've behaved better. -Anne Lamott, from Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life.

thank you so much, if you can check out my other work I would really apprietiate it!!

 


on May. 23 2010 at 8:16 pm
9Fairytale25Princess09 BRONZE, Keedysville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"When life throws you rocks, pick them up and throw them at your teachers=)"

This was so good. I think the suicide at the end really made it.

on Mar. 24 2010 at 2:57 pm
Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
65 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should've behaved better. -Anne Lamott, from Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life.

Hey! thank you so much for the comment, I guess the suicide does come a little unexpected, maybe should have dragged it out a bit more! Thank you for your opinion!

on Mar. 23 2010 at 5:52 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Uh... I didn't see the suicide coming to be honest. Everything was great and I loved it... until that happened. I wish I didn't say it but the death kind of ruined it for me and I typically enjoy things with dark endings. I don't know, maybe I'm not just seeing the beauty. Keep writing though, your style is great. Check out my work if you ever get the chance!

on Jan. 11 2010 at 2:50 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

omg i almost cried :) amazing job

samride said...
on Dec. 23 2009 at 5:44 pm
Wow, so sad but so good!

on Oct. 21 2009 at 9:56 pm
MusicalXMolly SILVER, Shelby Twp, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Live the life you love. Love the life you live.

Amazing! This made me cry, but it was great. We're neighbors too--Shelby Twp. :)

on Oct. 19 2009 at 7:31 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Nevermind, I know how to see them now, lol!

on Oct. 19 2009 at 7:29 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

I can't wait to check them out!!! What are they called?

on Oct. 19 2009 at 5:48 pm
Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
65 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should've behaved better. -Anne Lamott, from Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life.

thank you once again! I have a few other works on here. Please check them out!!!

bobally BRONZE said...
on Oct. 18 2009 at 9:45 pm
bobally BRONZE, Manchester, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"damned if you do, bored if you don't"

kind of morbid but beautiful. i love the way you wrote it; the descriptions make it relatable. awesome story:)

on Oct. 18 2009 at 8:15 pm
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

Your welcome! Keep writing! Very good literature!!!!

on Oct. 18 2009 at 1:12 pm
Emma.H.96 DIAMOND, Kalamazoo, Michigan
65 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should've behaved better. -Anne Lamott, from Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life.

Thank you so much!! It's all I can wish for that people like my work.

on Oct. 17 2009 at 10:35 am
EHunt96 PLATINUM, Swampscott, Massachusetts
32 articles 0 photos 215 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about."

I am speechless! I don't now what to say!!!!

That was great!!! I could picture the images in my head, it was very sad, but amazing!!!

on Oct. 9 2009 at 7:10 pm
LaLaLa<3 SILVER, Sterling Heights, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Love all, trust a few, do wrong to none." William Shakespeare

that's so sad but really good and we're like neighbors! sterling heights! oh yeah!