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Killer Eyes; part 1

September 26, 2009
By unwrittenlove DIAMOND, Mount Berry, Georgia
unwrittenlove DIAMOND, Mount Berry, Georgia
61 articles 11 photos 153 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, its yours forever. If it dosent, then it was never meant to be" -anonymous

I laugh as my friend, Max, shoots another spitball at the nerd in front of the room. Max gives me a high-five and rolls up another paper ball. Hearing the faint squeak of the door, I glance up. A girl walks in and heads to the teachers desk. I turn my attention away, uninterested. My eyes swept over the classroom checking out the scene. Max continued shooting spitballs while girls looked on admiringly. My on again, off again girlfriend, Carrie, was with her usual posse of mean girls. A group of punks huddled in the corner arguing about a new punk CD that came out today.
“Excuse me,” an annoyed, high-pitched voice spoke beside me. The girl who walked in earlier eased by Max and me to sit in the desk behind us. I shot her a disgusted look and turned back to my realm of students.
Being the most popular boy in school, star quarterback, and student body president had its perks. I ruled the school, with the most popular girl by my side. I smiled at the group of girls whispering and pointing in my direction. They giggled and turned away. The sound of clacking stilettos neared me. Carrie leaned down and kissed me. I pushed her away and she glared at me with her arms crossed.
“Why won’t you kiss me?” she demanded.
“Carrie, I told you this past weekend we are over. For good now,” I leaned back in my chair. I heard an audible gasp throughout the room. I could see the fire flash in Carrie’s eyes.
“Why do you have to be like this?” she sputtered.
“Why do you have to make fun of all the other girls that aren’t cool enough or aren’t skinny enough? I happen to know that some of them are really awesome,” I retorted. Carrie opened her mouth to retaliate but nothing came out for once. She stormed off and I grinned. The bell rang, signaling the end of the period. I grabbed my backpack and strode into the hallway. Luckily, my locker was close by, so in less than a minute I was turning the dial to open my locker. The bell rang again and students rushed to get to class. I took my time, putting in books and taking out my Chemistry textbook. The hallway was soon silent. I sighed and let the silence comfort me.
That all ended when there was a loud crash a few feet away. I turned and saw the new girl sprawled out on the ground. Her dark brown hair was spread out around her and her eyes were closed. Panicked I ran over to her and checked her out. I noticed that her small, blood red dress clung to her body in all the right places. I took her head in my arms and leaned down. She was breathing really fast and shallow.
“Hello?” I whispered. Looking down at her schedule, I saw that her name was Alexandra. “Alexandra?”
“Help me,” she whispered lowly. I leaned down again to hear her. “Help me.”
“What happened?” I almost shouted. Her eyes opened a little and I could see that they were a dark blue with a little purple around the edges. They were the most beautiful things I had ever seen.
“Help.” Her mouth formed the words once again. She closed her eyes and her body went limp.
“Help me! Help me!” I screamed; tears streamed down my face. “She needs help. Somebody help me!” My vision blurred and I heard a sea of voices around me. I shut them out. I had to help the girl with the killer eyes.

The author's comments:
My friend inspired this one. He loves to help people and I knew he would like this story.

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on Nov. 1 2012 at 6:11 pm
Ultim@te SILVER, Sisters, Oregon
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ahhhhh so what happens?!?!?!?!

on May. 31 2012 at 3:35 pm
This is AMAZING!! I loved it! It's the best one i've read!!!

on Mar. 4 2012 at 7:35 pm
Caroline Skjoedt BRONZE, Johns Creek, Georgia
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This is so great! I love it!

on Feb. 29 2012 at 8:06 am
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

i'm completely hooked. please ppl check out my work

on Feb. 3 2012 at 8:10 pm
Bookwizard PLATINUM, Watertown, New York
38 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you love something, let it go. If it comes back it was always yours, if it doesn't it never was.

Please go on with he story. It's amazinnnnnnn

on Nov. 7 2011 at 2:06 am
ToxicLove SILVER, Hunh, Other
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep"

-Robert Frost

WoW plz continue........itz sooooo awesum..........

IMme2 BRONZE said...
on Oct. 24 2011 at 11:59 am
IMme2 BRONZE, Farmington, New Mexico
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
just be yourself not some one your not.
- unknown

its great make it a novel i would soo read it!!!!!!!!

on Sep. 2 2011 at 1:09 pm
AlisaG101 BRONZE, Colchester, Connecticut
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather die tomorrow, than live a hundred years without knowing you"

This short story is amazing, i hope you write more to it :)

on Jul. 20 2011 at 11:57 am
Veryy Good I lOvedd itt eagerr too know wat  hapeenss nextt thumbss upp ! :D

on Jul. 6 2011 at 1:59 pm
NatChick SILVER, Muskegon, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Not everything that is faced can be changed. But nothing can be changed until it's faced."-James Baldwin

wow, incredible i want to know what happens next:)

on Jun. 14 2011 at 10:48 pm
bunbun74 SILVER, Fort Collins, Colorado
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omg this was so incredible it was an amazing cliff hanger! OMG OMG!

on Nov. 28 2010 at 4:06 pm
MissionaryKid BRONZE, Mitchell, Other
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Peace is a sacrifice of Trust"

Sweetness!!! I can't wait till part two!

on Nov. 6 2010 at 7:09 pm
CrazyWriter GOLD, Lorton Station, Virginia
16 articles 2 photos 102 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once you have given up on the most important thing in your life, you begin to die, because then, you gradually lose your true self"~Hana Kimi
"Someone who can lie to themself. . . is lonely, and in pain"~Hana Kimi

Its great however I'm a little confused about why he is crying for someone he probably doesnt even know... I'm just confused


btw: my articles loooovvveee to be read

on Sep. 23 2010 at 12:25 pm
freewriter_123 SILVER, Miramar, Florida
6 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Whoever said nothing was impossible never tried slamming a revolving door." ;)

I thought it was cool that he quoted that. It fits even though its not his

on Sep. 1 2010 at 2:51 pm
brown.sugar BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
1 article 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
i lovin it

first all i want to say good job. next you should write a part two you know so we can see what happens next. thanxs

TaylorLlover said...
on Aug. 10 2010 at 11:44 am
TaylorLlover, East Meadow, New York
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This was amazing, please write more

on Jul. 19 2010 at 12:13 pm
fyreflies BRONZE, Randolph, Wisconsin
4 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over. Smile because it happened." Doctor Suess
"Oh, of course it doesn't hurt to slide in softball." (before I tore up both knees and before I slapped that person)
"Stay with me here now/And never surrender" Skillet

Write more, please and THANK YOU. Now that I've said thank you, you are obligated to write more, Hahahahah!

on Jun. 7 2010 at 3:59 pm
Savvy_ PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
21 articles 11 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Call up the locksmith,
Tell him we need him quick,
We've got a million keys,
None of them seem to fit.

I want to read more (: I loved this.

melone96 said...
on May. 14 2010 at 6:56 pm
melone96, White Sulphur Springs, West Virginia
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write more! write more! i love this! her eyes sound so awesome! i'd kill 4 eyes like those!

on May. 14 2010 at 2:57 pm
Anique_ThePoet GOLD, Indianapolis, Indiana
10 articles 33 photos 111 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A writer should write with his eyes and painter paint with his ears." ~Gertrude Stein~

you have to keep building to this story!!! its great!!!