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She loved him, he loved her...

June 14, 2010
By Kristen_Jean GOLD, Bloomer, Wisconsin
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&quot;I walked away,<br /> not because I wanted to leave,<br /> but because I wanted to see if you would try to catch me.<br /> And when you didn&#039;t,<br /> I had the strongest urge to turn around and come back...again.<br /> But I didn&#039;t. <br /> I just kept on walking.&quot;

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From the moment they looked into eachothers eyes they were in love. They couldn't be seperate, and when they were forced to...they only thought of eachother. She was innocent. She neve loved someone as much as she loved him. But he was experienced, he loved many poeple. But he claimed that he only had feelings for her. But he claimed that with every heart that was broken before her. This thought haunted her. She knew the truth but she also knew the lov they shared was strong and pure. She loved him, she would die for him, she would give anything for him. She loved him. But he soon lost interest...he loved her but he also loved them, them, the other women, the ones before her. He was in love with them, with her, he knew he couldn't leave her without breaking her heart, but he had too. She looked out her window and saw him and her, they were loving, but she was broken. He made the choice to leav and leave her behind. She turned around and he was walking away, and he never said goodbye...</3

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this is a fairytale verson of what happened to me
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meganj SILVER said...
on Jun. 22 2010 at 6:33 pm
meganj SILVER, South Amboy, New Jersey
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&quot;You&#039;re going to come across people in your life who will say all the right words at all the right times. But in the end, it&#039;s always their actions you should judge them by. It&#039;s actions, not words, that matter.&quot; -Nicholas Sparks

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i really liked this. i could so relate to it. you should add to it, though, but besides that, it's really good(:
ashkash95 SILVER said...
on Jun. 18 2010 at 8:37 pm
ashkash95 SILVER, New Hyde Park, New York
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&quot;Love never fails.&quot; 1 Corinthians 13:8

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I like that it was short and almost in passing...makes it seem very realistic...and I'm sorry this is the fairytale version of what happened to you...guys can be jerks....
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 7:28 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Thank you!  I'm trying to get people to comment on my work, so I have some feedback-I want to know what people think of my writing.
TuffGurl said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 2:36 pm
oh, goodness. maybe make it longer. i've been seeing a lot of really short articles, and for some reason it's sorta bugging me. maybe start another one with this plot and make it like two articles? I would love to read it. 
Kristen_Jean GOLD said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 2:30 pm
Kristen_Jean GOLD, Bloomer, Wisconsin
15 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I walked away,<br /> not because I wanted to leave,<br /> but because I wanted to see if you would try to catch me.<br /> And when you didn&#039;t,<br /> I had the strongest urge to turn around and come back...again.<br /> But I didn&#039;t. <br /> I just kept on walking.&quot;

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yeah the reason for the errors is because the format wouldnt let me erase anything...the plot is that they are in love but he is in love with someone else and he leaves her for the other woman
TuffGurl said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 2:27 pm
it's interesting, but what's really the plot?? and u made some grammatical and spelling errors, but it's ok. I just didn't get the piece. 
polyprincess16 SILVER said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 2:05 pm
polyprincess16 SILVER, Tracy, California
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No one can make you feel inferior without your consent. ~Eleanor Roosevelt

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i really liked this, and i think its very relatable and sad but still cute. Could you maybe read some of my stuff as well? ;)
Kristen_Jean GOLD said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 12:33 pm
Kristen_Jean GOLD, Bloomer, Wisconsin
15 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I walked away,<br /> not because I wanted to leave,<br /> but because I wanted to see if you would try to catch me.<br /> And when you didn&#039;t,<br /> I had the strongest urge to turn around and come back...again.<br /> But I didn&#039;t. <br /> I just kept on walking.&quot;

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Thank you :) and I sure will.
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 17 2010 at 10:05 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Awww, that's really sad.  Great job, though!  I can really relate!

Btw, will you check out and comment on my work?