Hey, i love your peice it reminds me of a story i like when i get the scary storie books at the libary

This is such a helpful comment! I wish everyone commented like this. I have to say I agree with a lot of what you were getting at. Its great that you care so much.

I accually agree with yew. when i look bak at this, i always want to rewrite it, and i have. about 3 times, accually! I posted one new version, and ill be shure to post another soon!

Very good. Could use some improvement, but overall well-written. Again, avoid careless mistakes and over-used lines like, "It was a dark and stormy night." Good work :)

OK, I re-rwote this article. heres the link

TeenInk.com/raw/Fiction/article/106684/Untitled/

im rewriting this text, cuz i reread it, and i agree. it could use some improvement. and im also adding some at the end, cuz i got this idea, and so im gonna add that. and i didnt take ur advice as harsh. Ive taught myself 2 take advice as constuctive critasism. so thnx. give as much advice as you want. i dont mind.

much talent! I rly hope tht u didnt take my advice as harsh, i was rly just tryin2help bcuz i saw the comment u made on the bottom of ur piece. U dont have to even listen2my suggestions, its ttly okay:) Katelyn H. Check out iLove or Heartbroken or my profile(:

You are not a bad writer, but u certainly have room for improvement. Dont be discouraged, instead be encouraged that u started writing early. Here are some suggestions: In your twilight article as well as this one, you have many spelling and grammatical errors. (actress is spelled wrong in the other article. And in this one, there were many awkward lines: "I would die if I did", and "chasing my really.") Try rewording some things to make it flow better and avoid those careless mistakes. I think u have potential, but a long way to go. Also, work on your endings. Both of your pieces lack a solid conclusion. So if u aspire to be a writer, then just work on these things. The most important thing is PRACTICE PRACTICE PRACTICE. Keep writing to improve. In the mean time, check out some other teen authors and learn from them. If you have any questions or comments, just write a comment on one of my pieces with your question and Id be happy to help. I dont consider myself an expert, far from it, but I would be happy to share what I do know with you.

Advance search one of these pieces:

iLove

Caged

A Lake of Memories

The Cracked Foundation

all by me (Katelyn H. screen name is pinkvolleyballgirl)

And type your question or comment there.

I wish u all the best:)

plz comment. I need 2 know if I'm any good at writing. its my plan B in life, but I dont think I'm any good. So, plz comment and tell me what you think.

Thnx, Jess W.

I know, bad title, but i couldnt think of anything til' after I submitted it. sry 'bout that