Escape | Teen Ink


June 20, 2009
By SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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I close my eyes as my room begins to spin
I pull my knees up and tuck in my chin
Silent sobs escape from my throat
I wish I could escape too, by train or by boat
I'd travel to another, better world
Where I'd claim the land and have my flag unfurled
The rules will be mine and I'll keep my parents away
My buried laughter will again light the day.
Tonight I hide like I often do
Under my blankets soaking my pillow right through
My tears are spilling non-stop again
If this pain will end, I wonder when
I cry until I fall asleep
That's the only time I do not weep.
I hope when I wake up I'll be somebody new
Like one who has a happy family to love you
A father who'll help and refrain from threats
A mother who has children without regrets
Perhaps even a sibling or two
Giving me somebody to talk to
But until that miracle somehow comes true
I'm stuck with horrible days to live through.

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on Mar. 21 2010 at 7:03 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

this is amazing.

gr8 job!!

even though its very sad, it really can

move the reader.

plz keep it up!

on Mar. 18 2010 at 6:22 pm
kookymnstr PLATINUM, Crowder, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
" One good thing about music, When it hits you, You feel no pain."- Bob Marley

I'm in love with all your poems, they are really good.

on Dec. 15 2009 at 12:09 pm
Sunshine:D SILVER, Kenton, Ohio
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LiFiK GOLD said...
on Dec. 14 2009 at 8:42 am
LiFiK GOLD, Houston, Texas
10 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
We Learn More From Failure Than We Do Success;
Turn Your Wounds Into Wisdom

I'm feeling this one. Idk why but its just somethin about sorrow and gloom in petry that attracts me to it, this poem is great

on Dec. 12 2009 at 11:47 pm
katie_bugg GOLD, Scott Depot, West Virginia
14 articles 14 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"But my heart, it is brighter than all the many stars in the sky"

-Edgar Allan Poe

thanks for the comments, but my poems r nothing compared to ur's. U r amazing!

on Sep. 14 2009 at 8:30 am
MiuBlaze BRONZE, Upper Darby, Pennsylvania
3 articles 1 photo 7 comments
Amazing! I am in love with your poetry, haha. Mind if I start a fan club? :)

KLD1992 GOLD said...
on Aug. 5 2009 at 4:51 pm
KLD1992 GOLD, Bradford, Massachusetts
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Thanks for commenting on my poem i love this poem its amazing you can tell this poems from your heart

on Jul. 26 2009 at 7:45 pm
one_of_a_kind_girl GOLD, N/A, California
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You are an amazing writer. I can't even find words to describe it.

on Jul. 24 2009 at 9:51 pm
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

i love this poem, i wanted to also thank you for commenting on poem i really like this and i want you to keep writing, because i enjoy reading your poems

on Jul. 20 2009 at 5:14 pm
montreal132 SILVER, Rush, New York
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I would also like to thank you for your comment on my poem. i like a lot of your imagery, especially in the 6th and 10th lines. i LOVE the word "unfurled" its not one most people usually uses which is a shame. it fits with the line about escaping by train or boat, because when i think about flags unfurling i always think about old fashioned battle ships. :P

on Jul. 18 2009 at 10:34 pm
KiraKira PLATINUM, Cardiff By The Sea, California
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Favorite Quote:
Do not pity the dead, Harry. Pity the living, and above all, pity those who live without love -Albus Dumbledore

Thanks for commenting on my story! This poem is beautiful. I love it so much. The end rhyme is perfect, and the picture that this story brings made me cry. I hope that whatever trial that you are going through right now will soon come to pass and that soon you may see the sun once more. :)

on Jul. 16 2009 at 12:19 am
xXFadedFlowerXx GOLD, Roy, Utah
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Wow, Beautiful poem. You are a great writer. Thanks for the comment on my poem by the way!

cree8ive GOLD said...
on Jul. 15 2009 at 7:53 pm
cree8ive GOLD, Billings, Montana
16 articles 1 photo 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure." Mariane Williamson

i really like what you did with the rhyme, because a lot of time rhyme makes poetry sound kinda cliche. that really wasn't a problem here though.

on Jul. 15 2009 at 5:01 pm
carolinet BRONZE, Saratoga, California
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This is such a nice poem!

on Jul. 8 2009 at 12:01 am
Anne_K PLATINUM, Northfield, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"I don't like lollipops!" -Artemis Fowl

Good rhyming, very emotional. Good job! :)

PS I'm saying thank you for commenting on my poem!

on Jul. 6 2009 at 3:51 am
OneMoreWaywardPoet SILVER, Libertyville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"The world moves for love... It kneels before it in awe..."
- A quote from The Village

This is a beautiful poem, and it is obvious that you spoke from the heart. Thank you for allowing me a glimpse into your world and a chance to appreciate what I have in this world: a loving mother and step-dad...and a not so loving sister and brother >.< lol...I hope that whatever pain you are in now will clear up eventually because you deserve every happiness that there is. Good luck, and keep writing!


on Jul. 2 2009 at 12:14 am
camille_1441 PLATINUM, Westerville, Ohio
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I just wanted to thank you SO MUCH for the comment on my poem! I love yours too, I think it has a great meaning about how no matter what life's trials put you through you always need a family and how comforting it is to have one.

Great job! Keep writing!