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An Orchestra

October 22, 2009
By phoenix48 SILVER, Houston, Texas
phoenix48 SILVER, Houston, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 2 comments

I hate music
She yells. He yells louder.
That is the music
Which seeps through my walls.

Doors slam,
A car starts.
The blade dances
Over porcelain skin

At six in the morning,
Three in the afternoon,
Ten at night
My music plays loud.

His fist makes contact,
She yelps in pain.
The blade dances
Over porcelain skin
In a red river of tears.

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This article has 17 comments.

WikdChick GOLD said...
on Jan. 4 2011 at 1:39 pm
WikdChick GOLD, Shannon, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
I don't need a friend who changes when I change and who nods when I nod; my shadow does that much better.
When childhood dies, its corpses are called adults and they enter society, one of the politer names of hell. That is why we dread children; even if we love them, they show us the state of our decay.

Just how I like my poems, darkly beautiful. meaningful

on Jul. 29 2010 at 2:34 pm
MelanieLouise PLATINUM, Plymouth, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
to live a creative life, we must lose our fear of being wrong

really great poem :) keep writing, Mel. Check out my stuff if you would like

on May. 8 2010 at 7:10 pm
phoenix48 SILVER, Houston, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 2 comments
yea i posted a new poem too but its still pending :(, but thanks for the compliment and i really loved ur poems

on Feb. 16 2010 at 5:57 pm
shelby_kat DIAMOND, Warren, Ohio
72 articles 3 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can sum up everything I've learned about life in three words; it goes on." -Robert Frost

OMGGG! I loved this(: its very insightful and it blew me away.

also, thank you for checking out my stuff too, i acually put up alot better stuff but it hasn't been acceptted yet :/

on Feb. 14 2010 at 9:43 pm
Free.The.Poison PLATINUM, Hanford, California
31 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Even in our Darkest hour, we must always remember never to spare.

I agree with the others. Nice poem.

on Feb. 3 2010 at 4:23 pm
Alisha62293 BRONZE, Warwick, Rhode Island
2 articles 1 photo 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A man who dares to waste one hour of time has not discovered the value of life." Charles Darwin

I really like this poem. it has a nice flow to it =D

on Feb. 3 2010 at 4:12 pm
lily1411 BRONZE, Fargo, North Dakota
2 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
Absence sharpens love, presence strengthens it.

--Benjamin Franklin

i really like this one, very raw and gets the whole point across

on Nov. 1 2009 at 10:59 pm
roamfree BRONZE, Eatonville, Washington
1 article 9 photos 11 comments
I really like this poem. It has so much emotion. I especially like the lines The blade dances/Over poercelain skin. I also like the repetition which brings emphasis to the theme of the poem

on Nov. 1 2009 at 4:07 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
26 articles 0 photos 493 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This is really great, it paints a picture really well. I love how you use repetition to get your point across!

Venus Monday said...
on Oct. 31 2009 at 7:53 pm
I like this, it has feeling and a story to it.

on Oct. 31 2009 at 1:39 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is really pretty. This reminds me of the article I have to do in journalism class; about domestic violence.

on Oct. 30 2009 at 10:36 am
rosecrusher BRONZE, Union, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future is just the repeated past.

This is sad but it opens my eyes. I see what you are going through and my heart pittys for you. Poems are an excelent way to express your self and by you writing this poem you express your self very clearly.

egarrison said...
on Oct. 29 2009 at 7:48 pm
This poem really paints a picture in my head on how you feel about this and what your experiencing. This is a great peice of work that i am sure alot of people can relate to. I like how you named all the times that it has happened and exactly what it sounds like to you. I like how you compared this to music and how you hate it.

on Oct. 29 2009 at 4:44 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
23 articles 3 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

this is a very powerful and emotional poem. but PLEASE, if something like this is going on, you need to get to a safe place.

on Oct. 29 2009 at 12:52 pm
nevercliche159 BRONZE, Clark, New Jersey
3 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A man who has nothing to die for, is not fit to live."
--- Martin Luther King Jr.

This poem is so awesome....I can really hear and feel what you are trying to so. Do not change it!

on Oct. 28 2009 at 3:41 pm
roxamania96 GOLD, Rockville, Maryland
12 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If music be the food of love, play on" - Shakespeare

I don't think I can even explain how beautiful this poem is. It's perfect.

on Oct. 28 2009 at 11:18 am
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx

This is a beautiful poem!!! So many kids have parents that are in abusive relationships. i myself had to deal with many. cutting yourself is a resort that many teens are looking toward. This is a beautiful description of a cutters inner emotions and writings like tthis one are the ones that will open manys eyes toward this epidimic that is hitting are nation so quietly.