Goodbye | Teen Ink


August 15, 2011
By mclayne SILVER, Barrington, Illinois
mclayne SILVER, Barrington, Illinois
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A goodbye holds a promise
Some closure to the past
Whether it be a promise to return
Or to not

A goodbye means the end
But not always forever
It takes courage to say
And strength to hear

You had no courage
You said no goodbye
No warning
No promise
No closure
No reasons
Leaving me confused

So long I have been searching
Reaching out to you
Because all I needed to hear was

A goodbye says I care
Enough to give you some peace of mind
But clearly you didn't care
Or you would have told me goodbye

No promise of return
No promise to stay away
One moment there
The next you were gone

But it's been too long
Since I've heard your voice
Now I know you don't care
Or you would have at least said

A goodbye holds a promise
to return or to not
But I don't want you back
So dad this is goodbye

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on Aug. 18 2011 at 10:17 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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well i must first say is that i do love a twist at the end. so good job! the words need to be a little more flowy in my perspective, but it was a good piece. oh! and one thing i do advice is to always have a good title!! because think about it your title is what makes people interested to read your piece. but good job really! :)

on Aug. 18 2011 at 9:36 am
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 487 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

Wow this is an AMAZINGGG!!!! poem!!!  At first - to me, anyway - it kinda seems like a guy breaking up with a girl or just leaving her without saying goodbye, but then you really surprised me by saying goodbye to your dad!  That was a great twist and I absolutely looovvveeeddd thisss!!!!! <3

on Aug. 17 2011 at 7:27 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
11 articles 2 photos 276 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

Have you ever read something that just leaves you sitting there breathless because it's just so good? Well, I just did. Great work! (and if you don't mind, could you please check out some of my work?)

on Aug. 17 2011 at 1:48 pm
Sophie Rose Cope SILVER, Cape Town, Other
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments
this kind of poem - the words were.. sort of waitung inside me ( in a different form) and so to see this  written here, and me reading it by chance, well, I'm not sure if you'll get it, but let me just say that I really love your poem - it was very touching.

on Aug. 17 2011 at 12:14 pm
kaykaybeck PLATINUM, Petersburg, Michigan
24 articles 4 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life takes you somewhere, love helps you get there.

I absolutely loved it (: it was just amazing :D

on Aug. 16 2011 at 10:42 pm
RemorsefulPrincess BRONZE, Kitchener, Other
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Favorite Quote:
freedom is nothing but a chance to be better-albert comus
monsters are real, ghosts are real, they live inside us and sometimes they win-stephen king
guilt is the cause of more disorders then history's most obscene marorders-e.e cummings

this is a really amazing poem and it is so well written, it touched me sooo much it almsot made me cry because of its deepness keep up the seriously amazing work !! :)