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I love you, too.

January 6, 2012
By alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."

The author's comments:
My dad passed away last year and poetry has helped me cope. It's my heart spilled out into words. It feels amazing.

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on Jan. 10 2012 at 9:15 am
cebomar9 BRONZE, Brownsburg, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me" -Philippians 4:13

This is just powerful. Great Job

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on Jan. 9 2012 at 9:55 pm
SN3RD BRONZE, Glendale, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm the bugs bunny, and if you ain't got my carrots, you ain't got nothin' for me!" --Nicki Minaj

Depressing!!! I like it ;)

on Jan. 9 2012 at 9:53 pm
browneyez16 GOLD, Hephzibah, Georgia
10 articles 1 photo 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You may fail, but fall still fighting, don't give up whatever you do. Eyes front, head high, to the finish...see it through"

~See It Through by Edgar Albert Guest~

I'm with alice...i almost cried too...I don't know my real father but I appreciate my uncle who might as well be.

on Jan. 9 2012 at 9:37 pm
Michellebrain GOLD, Brooklyn, New York
12 articles 0 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
“A wise girl kisses but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, and leaves before she is left.”
-Marilyn Monroe

so beautiful. it made me want to cry. it made me realize that i should appreciate my father. thank you for this.

on Jan. 9 2012 at 8:09 pm
xXYourxRainXx BRONZE, Moyock, North Carolina
1 article 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't be afraid of shadows, it only means there's a light nearby" -Amy lee

Wow this is incredible, my friend's dad just recently passed away as well...wow...

on Jan. 9 2012 at 8:05 pm
Selustin_Gieber SILVER, Overland Park, Kansas
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have no quote that i'm in love with, but here's the one at the top of my head right now:
"An eye for an eye and the whole world goes blind." Gandhi....
I also like : " Don't wait for your boat to come to you, swim out to IT." ANonoymous...

WONDERIFIC>... that was just amazing... I was i could write like that.

on Jan. 9 2012 at 7:06 pm
EmmettHerculeLaFave SILVER, Tucson, Arizona
8 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We have it in our power to begin the world over again." -Thomas Paine

This was incredible. I'm terrible at poetry, and so it alwayds amazes me at how people can pull it off, but this was exceptional. Very well done. Totally emotional and believable.

on Jan. 9 2012 at 6:33 pm
holyblondecheerleaderbatman BRONZE, Wasilla, Alaska
1 article 2 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Who said I want to fit in ?

i thought it was beautiful and the way you wrote it .......... i love love poems and i think this is one of my favorites thanks for writing such an amazing poem

on Jan. 9 2012 at 6:24 pm
InvisibleHeart GOLD, Barony, Other
15 articles 4 photos 36 comments
Heart breaking. Very lovely and emotional poem!

on Jan. 9 2012 at 4:44 pm
SoSammieWhatsUP BRONZE, East Stroundburg, Pennsylvania
4 articles 1 photo 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you born poor it is not your fault, but if you die poor it is your fault." Bill Gates

this quote is not how it appears, it is about coming from nothing and making something of yourself.

my heart just broke your words areso powerfull through you writing oh gosh awesome job

on Jan. 9 2012 at 4:40 pm
RMStultz BRONZE, Avon, Indiana
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm gonna do me, you do you.

Very Good! I Love it!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 11:00 pm
Nathaniel PLATINUM, Huntsville, Missouri
36 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For there is nothing either good or bad, but thinking makes it so." --William Shakespeare

Striking piece. My most strongest feelings of empathy and sympathy are extended by it.

on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:47 pm
Zinaidia SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
8 articles 3 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
\\\"Whatever you are, be a good one.\\\"

Loved it! It almost made me cry, and that is rare. You have a gift, bravo!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:35 pm
Fabala_G BRONZE, Broomfield, Colorado
1 article 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Try to learn to breathe deeply,
really to taste food when you eat,
and when you sleep, really to sleep.
Try as much as possible to be
wholly alive, with all your might,
and when you laugh, laugh like hell,
and when you get angry, get good
and angry. Try to be alive. You will
be dead soon enough."
William Saroyan

That is very sad, but very touching. I like how you make the reader feel the emotion your character does.

on Jan. 8 2012 at 10:22 pm
MateoMansillaMoya GOLD, Reynosa, Other
18 articles 11 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
Minds are like parachutes. They only function when they are open.

It is such a great poem!! :D You should definitely keep posting this kind of poems!!

on Jan. 8 2012 at 8:11 pm
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

thank you SO much. i really appreciate it. :)

on Jan. 8 2012 at 8:03 pm
SeizeTheDay SILVER, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
7 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem (Seize the day).

So beautiful! I'm tearing up right now. I know that nothing will be the same without your dad.. But I really hope that you can hope. And I love the fact that you found writing as a creative outlet - because you are an amazing writer. Keep up the AMAZING work!! (:

on Jan. 8 2012 at 7:42 pm
NightGoddess17 PLATINUM, New City, New York
34 articles 0 photos 63 comments
this is soooo sweet! i love it!! at first i thought it was about a boyfriend... but thats cute that its about ur dad :)