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Shell of Existance

September 3, 2013
By hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.

Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We're flexible like that (;

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I'm not exactly happy,
But neither am I sad,
I'm simply in existence,
Why is that so bad?

I see the sun is there,
I squint at blinding streaks.
I know the sun is there,
But I do not feel it's heat.

I see the wind is there,
Dancing through the trees.
I know the wind is there,
But I do not feel its breeze.

I see the snow is there,
An angelic shade of white.
I know the snow is there,
But i do not feel its bite.

I am like a floating shell,
Completely lost at sea.
I may strike you as unique,
But I am lost and empty.

I'm not exactly happy,
But neither am I sad,
I'm simply in existence,
Why is that so bad?

© Tatyana Z., Norwood, MA

The author's comments:
This poem inspired me when I felt nothing. When I wasn't happy or sad, or angry or anything. I was just... there. And then I look up at the sun, over the trees, and thought how pretty it was, but I was still cold.
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Nella.Girl97 BRONZE said...
on Feb. 13 2014 at 10:23 am
Nella.Girl97 BRONZE, Ashland, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Keep on dreaming even if it breaks your heart."

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Wow! amazing poem! I love the repition on the one verse..its just amazing! Great work!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:12 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.

Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We're flexible like that (;

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Thank you my dear
Fallen_ PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:11 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 433 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

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Wow this is how I feel sometimes I like how you repeat I'm neither happy or sad why is that so bad :3 it really pulls everything together as always brilliant job
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 11:00 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.

Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We're flexible like that (;

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Thank you Mckay!
Mckay ELITE said...
on Sep. 13 2013 at 6:27 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

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I really like this one. The metaphor is just is very good. The repition as well. And the title is perfect. 
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 4:43 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.

Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We're flexible like that (;

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Repetitive is its style(: It is supposed to be, but thank you!!
BlottedInk said...
on Sep. 12 2013 at 4:40 pm
BlottedInk, Searsmont, Maine
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"The most wasted day of all is that on which we have not laughed." -Nicholas Chamfort

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wow i likeit !!!! i little repetitive, but very cute! :) Keep it up!!!!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 4:39 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.

Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We're flexible like that (;

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Thank you very much Hannah! That means so much.
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Sep. 11 2013 at 4:37 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
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"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
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This poem is brilliant. Everyone has felt this way- the emotion of feeling nothing is frightening, yet it happens to everyone. Your imagery is phenomenal and your rhyme scheme is very clever; Well done. Your a very talented writer!
hrj_nikki14 SILVER said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 7:53 pm
hrj_nikki14 SILVER, Apex, North Carolina
7 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
When life gives you lemons, make orange juice, and keep the world to wonder how you did it.

Women are like angels. You break our wings... we simply continue to fly... on broomsticks. We're flexible like that (;

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Thank you Kes. Your input is valuble :)
Kestrel PLATINUM said...
on Sep. 10 2013 at 6:23 pm
Kestrel PLATINUM, Warrenton, Virginia
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-There are more things in heaven and earth than are dreamt of in your philosophy. (Shakespeare, Hamlet)

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I really like it, Nik! It may not seem like it, but it's very relatable. I like the way you used parallel structure. Your rhyme scheme was a little flawed in a couple places, but it didn't disrupt the flow.