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For Now

April 9, 2014
By dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"


It will be years from now.
I'll be sitting solo at the bar
with one too many drinks
on my tab when you’ll
creep into my mind.
The thought of you
will be enough to
slump my shoulders
and buy me another drink.

It will be years from now.
I'll be starring at the symphony
of stars in the dark through
my bedroom window when
you’ll creep into my mind.
The thought of you will
be enough to close
my blinds and keep
me awake for hours.

Years from now,
with nothing else to do
I’ll think about your eyes;
only I can’t remember if they’re
green or they’re blue.

But for now,
I’ll be sitting by your side
and you’ll look me in the eyes.
They aren’t green,
or blue.
They’re brown.



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dinks PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 25 2014 at 2:19 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

I understadnt that completely, thank you!

NOIZTHIMS GOLD said...
on Apr. 24 2014 at 6:53 pm
NOIZTHIMS GOLD, South Jordan, Utah
15 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If your eyes could speak, what... what would they say?" -Max (from "The Book Thief")

I liked this poem a lot, it is cute, and I like the way you describe things. the one note that I wouyld give is that the way you put the lines/wording is a bit choppy because certain things on one line or another should be on different ones, but that's nit picky.

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 22 2014 at 6:09 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Good eye, I didn't catch that! Thank you!

dinks PLATINUM said...
on Apr. 22 2014 at 6:08 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
28 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

Thank you!!

KaavyaM SILVER said...
on Apr. 22 2014 at 10:43 am
KaavyaM SILVER, Hyderabad, Other
9 articles 1 photo 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
To live is the rarest thing in the world. Most people exist, that is all.

This is just so lovely. The poem has a rhythm and flow of its own even without rhyming words or any meter, and that's a sign of real talent. Only thing, in the second line of the second stanza, the word should probably be 'staring', nor 'starring'. But great job. I love a couple of metaphors you've used, especially "The symphony of stars".

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Apr. 21 2014 at 8:00 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Beautifully written poem. I love poetry that tells a little story like this one. Your wording is fantastic, as well as your imagery. Also, I love the repetition of "It will be years from now," and how you gradually change the phrase as the stanzas move on. Wonderful job, and elegantly put :)