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Raindrops

September 27, 2009
By Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss


I slam the door shut, breathing as heavily as though I’ve just run a mile. My heart is pounding so furiously I fear it will burst, my eyes blink furiously, keeping tears at bay, and my hands are trembling. I can feel it pulsing through me.
It is raging, fighting to get out of me; I don’t know what to do or where to go. I can hide it from everyone, but when I am alone, it catches up to me, tormenting and exhilarating me. The raindrops pound on the windows and lightning flashes, while thunder resounds inside my heart.
I throw myself onto the bed, ignoring the wind which has sprung up, inside and outside. It catches me, lifts me up, whips my hair around. I clap my hands over my ears in agony, trying not to give in to the longing that is so potent; I can almost taste it on my tongue. It nudges me tantalizingly, dancing just out of reach, and I clench my eyes shut in an effort to resist. But I can’t let it go, no matter how hard, how desperately I try—it won’t let me. Its grip on me is so tight, my breathing becomes shallow and I feel light-headed. Resistance is futile.
I leap from the bed, go to the glass doors, throw them open, and run out into the pouring rain. Within seconds, I am soaked, chilled to the bone, but flying, my bare feet hardly touching the ground and my long hair streaming out behind me. My feet carry me to a place I know well, a place I have gone to since I was very small. No one is outside in the rainy twilight, but I keep running, my heart pounding and my legs burning, not stopping even when I reach the woods.
It’s pulling me with a force stronger than a magnet, on and on, until at last, I reach the bridge and skid to a halt, mud spattering my clothes. The creek is swollen, and the freezing water splashes my feet. My heart is in my throat—I take baby steps onto the bridge, gasping for breath, water running down my face, shivering in the cold, my eyes fixed upon the figure waiting there.
He’s here—just as wet, just as cold, but here, smiling as I run to him and he enfolds me in his arms. It is then that my first sob escapes me. I know this can never be. But I am calm; a cloud of bliss surrounds me as we stand there on the bridge, arms around each other, for a long time, keeping the cold at bay while the falling raindrops glint like diamonds around us.



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on Apr. 1 2010 at 4:43 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
11 articles 8 photos 261 comments

Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

i could feel the emotion so well!!! this is truly unique!

on Apr. 1 2010 at 10:15 am
caaaaause #1 is perfection

Vangog SILVER said...
on Mar. 15 2010 at 7:35 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Thank you! :)

on Mar. 10 2010 at 5:01 pm
ChristianCowgirlCC SILVER, Wellington, Kansas
6 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Galatians 1:10
"Am I now trying to win the approval of men, or of God? Or am I trying to please men? If I were still trying to please men, I would not be a servant of Christ."

Beautiful piece, by the way (:

on Mar. 10 2010 at 5:01 pm
ChristianCowgirlCC SILVER, Wellington, Kansas
6 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Galatians 1:10
"Am I now trying to win the approval of men, or of God? Or am I trying to please men? If I were still trying to please men, I would not be a servant of Christ."

Haha, or how much control they have over our emotions?! Yeah. Probably not. (:

on Mar. 10 2010 at 3:52 am
Rosalie PLATINUM, Maryville, Tennessee
48 articles 0 photos 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
-you have many to learn but nothing to lose.
-the hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love someone else...
-good girls are bad girls that dont get caught.

this is beautiful..

Vangog SILVER said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 8:03 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

DX Probably not

Vangog SILVER said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 8:03 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Thank you!! :)

on Jan. 25 2010 at 7:28 am
MarinaOreo GOLD, King Of Prussia, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 148 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your soul is the whole world" -Siddhartha by Hermann Hesse

I've experienced forbidden love too :( It's really unfortunate but this was really beautiful. :) You're a great writer.

on Jan. 11 2010 at 9:17 pm
Georgia-Girl GOLD, Greenacres, Washington
12 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't frown, you never know who is falling in love with your smile!

do guys even know how complicated they make our lives?

Vangog SILVER said...
on Jan. 11 2010 at 5:08 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

hahahaha definitely

on Jan. 10 2010 at 5:05 pm
Georgia-Girl GOLD, Greenacres, Washington
12 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't frown, you never know who is falling in love with your smile!

i totally understand. well done. i have felt that ...only one sided. haha. strange emotion though it's almost you fall on purpose just because you know you aren't suposed to.

Vangog SILVER said...
on Jan. 10 2010 at 4:25 pm
Vangog SILVER, Sterling, Virginia
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

whole story? why, it's forbidden love, of course =) there isn't much more to it

on Jan. 9 2010 at 12:26 am
Georgia-Girl GOLD, Greenacres, Washington
12 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't frown, you never know who is falling in love with your smile!

wow. how did you do that? tell me the whole story between the lines. it was like forbidden magic.

on Jan. 3 2010 at 8:20 pm
DreamWriter17 PLATINUM, Marengo, Indiana
34 articles 1 photo 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
learn from your past to live for the future.

Wow. The description is so crystalline. The emotion is so powerful. Love it. Wonder why it isn't #1.

on Dec. 12 2009 at 8:45 pm
KiraKira PLATINUM, Cardiff By The Sea, California
35 articles 0 photos 217 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not pity the dead, Harry. Pity the living, and above all, pity those who live without love -Albus Dumbledore

Perfect, absoloutley perfect

on Nov. 20 2009 at 9:20 pm
.riley.bonjour.la.freek. GOLD, Charlotte, North Carolina
10 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about where you are, it's about who you are. -Riley (me)
do you remember when you were four, and everything was possible? I remember those days, but dang, i gotta get back to reality. -Riley (me)

break ups are so hard!

I express my feelings by writing it out too.

I feel like i get it out of me.

Perfect with the details.

Beautiful!

Good Job!

(:

on Oct. 15 2009 at 10:41 am
Midnight-Rose BRONZE, Grand Junction, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't measure life by the number of breaths you take, but by the moments that take your breath away."

This is a really good piece and I love the detail. Good Job!

on Oct. 11 2009 at 11:26 am
SilverAngel SILVER, West Carollton, Ohio
8 articles 0 photos 63 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life is an open book, we take the journey until the end." ~Me

I really like it! I had to read until the end to figure out what was going on though. Nice job! ☺☻♥

on Oct. 10 2009 at 6:16 pm
EternalMadness GOLD, Fresno, California
13 articles 1 photo 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
They say it's what you make
I say it's up to fate
It's woven in my soul
I need to let you go
Your eyes, they shine so bright
I want to save their light
I can't escape this now
Unless you show me how
When you feel my heat
Look into my eyes
It’s where my demons hide

I actually think the vagueness is good in your sense, it gives the reader the intent to keep reading with curiousity. i loved it :p