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Beautiful Soul

October 13, 2010
By jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."


Her love is so beautiful
It drenches me in
vanilla twilight
its like a nightmare
cause i care for her
she is the apple of my eye
she is a angel that glistens
when she laughs
when she is near its like heavy
drops of atmosphere falling
her voice is a lovely tune
in my head
her love is in the eye of
her beholder
she is sweet and
delicate as a flower
she stops the pain
in the blink of an eye
her love is as strong
as an ox
she is as beautiful as
a falling angel
she is as good as a female fox
her smell lingers on me like flowers
her body is as slim and
curvy as a guitar
her tattoo on her chest protects her from her heart getting broken like an iron fist


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on Mar. 7 2011 at 12:15 pm
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."

send me some of your work please

on Nov. 4 2010 at 4:49 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

No problemo!!!! If get a chance would you mind checking out some of my work? Thanks!!! :)

on Nov. 4 2010 at 10:48 am
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."

thanks for comments from you

on Nov. 4 2010 at 10:48 am
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."

thanks for comments from you

on Nov. 4 2010 at 10:48 am
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."

thanks for comments from you

on Nov. 4 2010 at 10:47 am
jamesacolson PLATINUM, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
22 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God grant me the serenity to accept the things i cannot change, Courage to change the things i can, and Wisdom to know the difference. "

"Crying doesn't indicate that you're weak; Since birth it has been a sign that you are alive."

thanks for comments from you

on Oct. 26 2010 at 6:21 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.
-Alex (aka GangstaEyes)
Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.
-Winston Smith '1984'
Don't go wishin' your life away...
-Daddy S2
"What a drag it was to be limited by reality."

Awww this is beautiful and very sweet! The last line is my favorite definately and I agree that you could improve on "as good as a female fox" and "strong as an ox" other than that i loved it

inspir3d GOLD said...
on Oct. 26 2010 at 2:12 pm
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
11 articles 2 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

this is really sweet and the thought behind it is good, but there's some things that could be improved. For instance, "as good as a female fox"...doesn't really make sense. Also, were you listening to Vanilla Twilight by Owl City as you were writing this? i could tell.

on Oct. 25 2010 at 7:55 pm
spirit_bound GOLD, Clarmore, Oklahoma
18 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The human spirit is not measured by the size of the act, but the size of the heart"

i like it alot, i could really feel the emotion as i read this, keep writo=ing, your very talented

 


TWLOHA SILVER said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 1:37 pm
TWLOHA SILVER, Seattle, Washington
5 articles 1 photo 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am Strong because I am Weak
I am Beautiful because I know my Flaws
I am a Lover Because I'm a Fighter
I am Fearless because I have bee Afraid
I am Wise because I have been Foolish
...and I can Laugh because I've known Sadness

This is good and I love really the last line,,.