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September 23, 2011
By MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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Tears flow down my face
lonlieness creeps in my soul
trying to wipe away the pain
remembering you makes me strong
you were my life
you were my brother
rascel

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MrsensitiveE GOLD said...
on Dec. 25 2011 at 12:47 am
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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thank you baby
cookiegirl said...
on Dec. 25 2011 at 12:44 am
Wow. This is amazing and beautiful:). I love this poem.
MrsensitiveE GOLD said...
on Dec. 8 2011 at 10:05 am
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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thank you i really appreciate it

 

RaveFire PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 8:06 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
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this is amazing because although it is short, it is strong. it has so much feeling. this poem carries sadness and lonliness but it also carries love
MrsensitiveE GOLD said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 10:10 am
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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thanks i really appreciate the critisism and ill be posting more in a couple days
MrsensitiveE GOLD said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 10:09 am
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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but thanks

 

MrsensitiveE GOLD said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 10:08 am
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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i could do better

 

Amsterdamsel DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 8:34 am
Amsterdamsel DIAMOND, Henderson , Nevada
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honestly, it's just okay.

Loneliness, tears, etc. It''s very overdone and this isn't too creative, compared to what you could have done. The only part that was unique was Rascel. I want to know more about Rascel, why he died or if he's just gone somewhere.  Next time you write, put a little more personality into it, not just a cookie cutter poem. I believe you have the potential to write something really good about this "Rascel"

Erin M. said...
on Oct. 6 2011 at 6:54 am
I like your poem its realy good and kinda sad at the same time, but keep up the work!!!! :)
MrsensitiveE GOLD said...
on Oct. 4 2011 at 10:23 am
MrsensitiveE GOLD, Apple Valley, California
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hey people comment on this plz i wanna know if its good