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The Script (Updated version of "Visibility")

October 21, 2012
By WhenItRains21 GOLD, Magnolia, Texas
WhenItRains21 GOLD, Magnolia, Texas
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That's what I would give you. I would let you into the deepest corners of my life. I would tell you all my secrets. I would show you all my scars.
I would let you watch as my dreams burst, exploding, rupturing, creating a space for you to move into, a hole with no dry hopes to fill it, needing life and sustenance that I would find in you. You would become the most precious thing. You would become my whole world, because you would know everything about me. You would become me.
Me. My image. My memories.
Memories of things long passed, of hopes long forgotten. Memories that I would present to you, full both of comedy and tragedy, tales of unspoken pain and unseen joy.
But then, you would see through it all. You would know my memories can't be trusted, because you would know my present, the very things I see through my eyes at this moment. You would become my eyes. You would see through my eyes just as I saw it, and would watch as I took the razorblade that you would become to me and caressed my skin with it, drawing pictures across the blank canvas my body would be. You would watch as the blood convened into a single drop that would say more in a fleeting second than a thousand stories in a thousand years. You would watch with me as I took it all—my pleasure and pain, my beauty and scars, my laughter and tears—and ripped it apart, tearing at the fleshy edges, consuming it, bringing every tiny piece of its raw intensity into myself, into you. I would take it, the convoluted morsel of my own being, and form it, gently, lovingly, into an image of myself. Like a voodoo doll, I would watch as it became me. As it became you, for you would have become me.
But I am not gentle or loving. As I stared into the mirror, I would see myself. A demonic guise I loathe. Lips I would rip from my own face, for they have spoken lies that not even I would dare repeat. Eyes I would gouge from the sockets, for they have seen blood on innocent hands. I would look at you, and see in you everything I wish to be. The me I never was. I would hate you for the very thing that draws me to you: your perfection. Not perfection of yourself, but of myself. You are the me I always wanted to be. I would tremble in rage, clawing at my own skin, thirsting for my own blood and pain, wanting only to be you. But it would never happen, for you would have become me. I would look back into that mirror and see only another flawed, hellish face. Not you, but me. I would see that I have broken you, to such a tragic point that you are unable to be fixed. Tears would be shed. But then I would take my hands, my own sinning hands, and force them upon the mirror, again and again, until the glass had shattered onto my feet and my skin had turned raw, torn and bleeding.
The pieces of the broken mirror, lying dead at my feet, I would pick up. I would take their razor edges and tear apart the little doll of myself, created from everything I ever had been. You would tell me to stop. I would lie; I would tell you I had never begun. But I would not stop, not until my own essence was as scattered as the mirror's glass.
You would cry for me, for my pain. You would tell me words I once longed to hear, words of my own beauty and tales of my perfection. You would take the doll, and you would piece it together, thread by thread, keeping only the good and discarding the bad in the Hell that my entire shaking frame so deserves.
And to see you in such pain, I would become more broken than ever. Though your words would have been too little, too late, I would cherish them. With my entire essence, I would hold them in my arms, my small, fragile arms, laced with the scars of yesterday's deadly tragedies and tomorrow's unseen pain.
But here, we would reach the point of truth. It would be the only thing that really mattered, in the tale of comical sin. What would you do next?
But I wouldn't ever ask. I would know.
You would take the words I held so gently and rip them away from me, handing them over to the next one you saw, leaving me with more scars than any blade ever could. You would turn to me and give my own essence back to me, the me I thought I had hurt you with. I would see you were unharmed. I would see that everything was merely a play upon the stage that is the world, and I was just another actor alongside you, the star.
You would take off the costume you had donned, washing away lies and pain and tears in a single moment, washing the makeup off next and revealing perfection rather than the scars and flaws you would have shown me. You would hand me the script, in which I would see that you had played your part beautifully, and I would find myself laden with sympathy for you regardless.
Everything you would have told me, all lies, I would still carry with me, though I knew you had shed it all moments before. But I would never be able to rid myself of my scars, of my stories, of my life. I would always be the same person. The only thing that would change would be the stage around me and the characters beside me. I would know I would never be the one in the costume. Everything would have to be laid out for the audience to see, all the sins I had ever committed.
But I wouldn't let anything like this happen a second time. I would go back to the mirror, and in the shards I would find myself, bloodied and broken but ready for a second round.
I would become the playwright. I would always know the ending.
To keep myself alive, I would keep myself off of the stage. But this, I would always know, would be my undoing. I would always think that the next one would never be as horrid as the first. But my scarred and twisted mind, wrapped in bleeding bandages from the first betrayal, would always protest.
Because that's what happened the first time. I was broken, with no one there to hold me as I lie alone, bleeding, my life pouring from my wounds and onto my flawed skin, tainting the mirror with the dull red mistakes I always have and always will make, no matter how hard I try not to.
And that's why, when you asked me, I said nothing.
Because I knew how it would end.
And in the end, I was right, wasn't I? You convinced me to let go of the pen, to give up the façade of playwright. I took the pen and cast it down among the still shards of glass from the broken mirror, silenced by fascination as the violet ink cascaded from its well, spreading through the tattered pages like a disease, the words on the paper becoming veins through which the dark liquid swam. You took my hand, wet with tears and ink and blood, and led me back to the stage, and I gladly played along, hiding myself within the lights and the eager, hungry faces of the crowds. In this peculiar play I found myself at ease, letting my scars and beauty alike shine on center stage, discovering the wonder of being the lead role and not second best, not overshadowed by a seasoned deceiver. I bathed in the soft glow of the spotlight, gently washing away the delicate pain. All the walls I had so laboriously built came cascading down, falling around me like the broken pieces of mirror I had left behind, flowing away from me and covering the stage in the remnants of my bruised past.
But it was then, at my most vulnerable, that I saw the script. I had fallen victim to my own tragedy, to a tale of woe and regret I had penned long before. There I stood, wrapped in a costume, in threads of joy, watching a comical retelling of the disaster I tried so hard to avoid.
And as with all great plays, this one came with a dose of irony concealed within its fraying edges that you cleverly wove into the story I knew all too well. As the final act commenced and my character saw its demise, the curtains closed and you smiled as I was pulled away. Dragging me down, you ripped at the pretense I had become and I realized that, for the first time, I could finally shed my own costume, an elegant masquerade of happiness and acceptance that I had come to accept as truth.
Alone with a broken mirror and destroyed pages and spilled ink, I face my hardest decision yet. I long to leave the stage forever, but have discovered that I also long to return, to feel the spotlight on my broken skin alongside you, the one to change my mind.
The one who brings a smile to my tear-stained face, even as I recall your elegantly planned betrayal, your elaborate scheme to cut down the final jagged pieces of my barely beating heart. The one who I can never regret, because regret would mean I would have to let you go, and to let you go would mean to give up all hope of returning to the stage I have dreaded for so long.
And even as I watch you take the hand of another player, an actress more beautiful than I could ever hope to be, I hope one day to be there next to you again, in the harsh light speaking the words that lead to only more scars.
But the blood around my shaking body, the little pools of liquid agony, remind me of my mortality, and to revisit that stage would surely mean my own death. Looking at the tragic scene around me, the fallen pen and ruined pages, I know that I must start over. I must be the playwright to a new play, a new masterpiece to kill off the unpleasant ends I know will consume me.
Here, at the crossroads of my next tale, I see that there are two stories to be written, and all I must decide is which to embrace.
The blood will dry and the wounds will heal, and the scars left behind will be the script to my own tragedy, chronicling every act and scene. So now, blade in hand, I write the end.

The author's comments:
This is the updated and extended version of the original, "Visibility."

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on Apr. 4 2013 at 7:48 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
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Wow um, are there words to describe this? How does one read a happy Flowery peice after this? All I can say is amazing. By FAR the best peice I have read all week, and thank u also for checking out my work. I think you will also (maybe) like my peice as the world goes on because it kinda relates to this. All in all amazing job. I was watching it in my head as I read along. Honestly u ae gifted. NEVER. STOP. WRITING. Pleeeeese amazing 5/5 stars and on my favorites list. Even though it can be kinda disturbing, it's raw nd original, not atall like those other sorties about cutting that u can't even begin to understand. Wow I feel like crying. Have I said to much. Did I say enough? The gist is this: amazing

on Mar. 22 2013 at 7:11 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
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This is poetry.  Really, really exceptional.  Your imagery and metaphors and word choice, all just flawless and spellbinding.  You capture that overdone concept in a way that seperates it from everything else.  The only thing I would say is that since the last half of the piece is using the whole "stage, playacting" metaphor, I would work that into the begining too (not that the begining  methapors aren't cool, love the voodoo doll one).  But I'm probably wrong, like the playacting one shows a different part of the story.  But really, this is SO GOOD!

on Feb. 15 2013 at 10:30 pm
E.J.Mathews GOLD, International Falls, Minnesota
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This piece dives into the soul, and pulls out pure, raw emotion. So many different feelings were pulled to light, that I had a hard time keeping track of them all. Outstanding job, I hope that you write more pieces like this!

on Feb. 6 2013 at 3:27 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
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wow, um...that was awesome. I like the whole giant metaphor thing, that's so cool. and also I like your style, it makes the whole piece seem rushed and confused like the character's relationship-you know in a good, planned type of way. real great job!

on Feb. 5 2013 at 9:29 am
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

Wow...that was deep. ANd very nicely written :)

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on Dec. 13 2012 at 6:17 pm
CammyS SILVER, Papillion, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
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Don't say the old lady screamed. Bring her on and let her scream.
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Wow. This is so descriptive! It was really disturbing and scary to me, how you compared the person to a razor blade. It's not my type of story, but it's really good in a more disturbing way.

on Dec. 6 2012 at 8:10 pm
Stella_Val_Illicia GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
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--Douglas Adams

I love this. It's very complicated, but in a good way, in the way that a snowflake is complicated. It's symmetrical, but so intricate. I just love this story. It perfectly illustrates how a lot of people feel, while at the same time creating beautiful metaphors. This is wonderful.