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crushing my fantasy

November 8, 2010
ImagineWhatItWouldBeLikeToFly SILVER, Acton, California
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Favorite Quote:
“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the entire world, and all there ever will be to know and understand.” - Einstein


What if you felt really alone
But you never wanted friends?
What if you felt like dying
But it sort of made you live?
Living in a world
With your mind far away
Unwilling to face reality
Until they crush your fantasy

You tried and you tried
To do what was right
But some artists only see black and white.
So now you can bury yourself alive
In the magic they could never find
What if you're happy when you're sad?
What if the little things make you mad?
The discrepancy's in the lining
The over-dramatized designing

Living for a moment
That will never be
Waiting til' heaven
Living in my dreams.



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AnonyMiss GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 11:35 pm
AnonyMiss GOLD, Houston, Texas
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i can identify with this poem so well....and the lines "the discrepancy's in the lining/the over-dramatized designing" just has such a nice pattern to it. Great job!

on Nov. 23 2010 at 10:44 pm
breeeegreen BRONZE, Watsonville, California
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i really liked this. i relate and understand this, beautiful poem

on Nov. 23 2010 at 10:21 pm
ImagineWhatItWouldBeLikeToFly SILVER, Acton, California
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Favorite Quote:
“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the entire world, and all there ever will be to know and understand.” - Einstein

Thanks so much! And thank you for critiquing it, too. When I write, it's usually right before I go to bed or when I'm upset and the words just sort of come out, so whatever I said wasn't planned, it came from my feelings. I appreciate you pointing it out though, because I'd love to improve my writing in any way I can. :)

on Nov. 23 2010 at 6:32 pm
dancingintheflames GOLD, Kirksville, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
She stood in the storm and when the wind didn't blow her away, she adjusted her sails<3

That was really great!! i loved reading it:)

 


on Nov. 23 2010 at 4:45 pm
wolfpack270 SILVER, Oak Ridge, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
"Beware your thoughts for they become words. Beware your words for they become actions. Beware your actions for they become habits. Beware your habits for they seal your fate."

I really liked this poem. It makes you think and even if at first you don't think the poem applies to you I think most people will find that there is some part of this poem that they have thought about at some point. The only thing i didn't like was the ending. The last stanza doesn't seem to fit in my opinion, but its not my writing ^_^

on Nov. 23 2010 at 1:21 pm
Tatyana DIAMOND, Colorado, Colorado
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this is great

 


on Nov. 23 2010 at 10:26 am
ImagineWhatItWouldBeLikeToFly SILVER, Acton, California
6 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Imagination is more important than knowledge. For knowledge is limited to all we now know and understand, while imagination embraces the entire world, and all there ever will be to know and understand.” - Einstein

never heard of that :) haha

on Nov. 23 2010 at 9:39 am
melissarose BRONZE, Readstown, Wisconsin
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hi. so these look like some lyrics from mudvayne.... ?

on Nov. 23 2010 at 1:12 am
I_am_the_only_me GOLD, Bakersfield, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Risk more than others think is safe. Care more than others think is wise. Dream more than others think is practical. Expect more than others think is possible. " ~ Cadet Maxim
that's an awesome quote learn it, love it, live by it.

Loved it! :D good job. Keep writing!