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You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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on Jan. 5 2015 at 2:08 am
kennedyshine PLATINUM, Corte Madera, California
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The perpetual pursuit for an unattainable freedom

I'm confused why this isn't in the magazine

DLove BRONZE said...
on Dec. 31 2014 at 11:26 am
DLove BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
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Life is not about how good it is, but how good you make it

This is a very inspirational sonnet, not hard at all to relate to

Paakhi said...
on Dec. 24 2014 at 6:54 am
It's beautiful :) I love this poem

on Dec. 17 2014 at 6:33 pm
@Westiera thanks so much, I love writing poems but don't know very many types of poems I keep the rules of poems in a notebook I use for writing prompts. This was a big help, I googled Quatrains and couplets and wrote down how many lines and 3 common rhyme schemes for the couplets and what open and closed couplets were.

on Dec. 11 2014 at 6:30 pm
Your sonnet was very good. Im getting some inspriataion from it as well. I had the same thing happen to me. I met up with my best-friend and she wasnt the same. She walked different, talked differnt but the thing I noticed the most was her additude. She treated me like I was her butler and I didnt like it. The girl I used to know, was gone.

on Nov. 17 2014 at 10:42 am
BlackNek0 BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
“I don't think..." then you shouldn't talk, said the Hatter.” ― Lewis Carroll, Alice in Wonderland

I like your sonnet its verry now. Many peots have started leaving the iambic pentamete and the rules. if you searched online you would find many famous poets not fallowing poetic rules one inculding shakespear himself. Your poem had feeling that is all that matters.

cheymars227 said...
on Nov. 4 2014 at 1:56 pm
Please stop being so picky about HOW she wrote it, just notice she got her story out and that it is beautiful. We shouldn't have to follow someone else's rules just to write a nice piece. Let her be, please. From a fellow "poet" one that doesn't follow so called laws of poetry

on Aug. 18 2014 at 12:48 pm
honestly i don''t care about the structure the MESSAGE is amazingly and horrifyingly true. you'vejust inspired me to write about my brother his story is similar to yhour friend's look for it soon "Brother"

on Aug. 2 2014 at 3:02 pm
OzymandiasAengus PLATINUM, Bronx, New York
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OK, as an actual answer (There are a lot of restrictions on a true sonnet so this is gonna be a little long.)
  Each line of a sonnet has five (penta) units, each of which is an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable (an iamb). 
There are 14 of these lines, 3 "groups of 4" (quatrains), where the 1st & 3rd as well as the 2nd & 4th lines rhyme. Then, at the end is a rhyming couplet, which usually sums up the poem.  Make sense?

on Jun. 19 2014 at 6:21 pm
Westiera SILVER, Wasilla, Alaska
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All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. - Edgar Allan Poe

An elizabethan sonnet actually contains 14 lines with 3 quatrains and one couplet each line must have 10 syllables making it have an iambic pentameter

on Jun. 9 2014 at 4:20 pm
mylifeasapincushion GOLD, Redlands, California
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"Extremist have shown what frightens them most: A girl with a book"
-Malala Yousafzai

A four stanza, sixteen line poem consisting of the rhyme scheme: abab cdcd efef gg

on May. 23 2014 at 6:03 am
HermioneHainsworth PLATINUM, Leeds, Other
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"There's always another book to read, and if not, write one."-me ;)

Amazing.. thats all I can say!

kayla will said...
on May. 19 2014 at 9:48 pm
It's a sonnet... and it's supose to be fourteen lines. That's what a sonnet is. :)  ...I love them!

kayla will said...
on May. 19 2014 at 9:46 pm
A sonnet is a 14 lined poem... it's a literary device that poets use and is my favorite type of poems to write, it's almost all that I do write. I love reading them even more for even greater ideas!!

seriously said...
on May. 4 2014 at 9:22 pm
Will someone please tell me what a sonnet is?

on Mar. 30 2014 at 9:09 pm
Laugh_Live_Write BRONZE, Mukilteo, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"All our dreams can come true, if only we have the courage to pursue them." -Walt Disney

This is a great poem! Short, sweet, and relatable.

on Feb. 27 2014 at 8:20 pm
thedakota127 BRONZE, Davisburg, Michigan
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"Sometimes its right to do the wrong thing." -Dr. Jeffery Squires

Try making it longer. It's good so far though :)

on Feb. 17 2014 at 10:26 am
micshea99 PLATINUM, Matthews, North Carolina
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Great poem! Try working on keeping around the same number of syllbales in each rhyming line to give it a more constant rythem!

on Jan. 25 2014 at 10:54 am
Ms.Grossi PLATINUM, Malden, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"If I wasn't an actor, I would have been a secret agent." - Thornton Wilder

@xG4RY, I agree. It's a great poem, but I wouldn't call it a sonnet. 

on Jan. 12 2014 at 9:43 am
LittleMissFire BRONZE, Saint Catharine, Missouri
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Your poems very relatable. I like it a lot