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Your Heart Was My Home Until You Handed Me an Eviction Notice MAG

November 15, 2008
By amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
amanda.bower SILVER, Stacy, Minnesota
9 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
maybe i know that you'll crave my secure arms someday, but i'll have come across someone who wasn't afraid. and that's why i can't let go.

I removed the layers of blankets from my aching bones
to excavate the secrets that were held together by saliva
in papier-mâché envelopes, only to chew on disappointments
and lie on shards of fragile stained glass that tampered with my flaws,
instead of putting me back together with multicolored duct tape
so gray was only found inside of my body.

I wrung the tears from your sweatshirt and decided it was time
to give it back to you, in exchange for my serpent heart

[barely beating,

barely breathing];
instead of curling inside your stomach and making you
nearly as ill as I had become, just by drinking venomous nectar
and digesting fireflies so a small portion of me would feel alive,
I climbed over your picket fence and let you recline my eyes
in another awkward position to the point where I only chain-smoked
the main exhibits of your aesthetic proportions and declined
every deficiency of the person you truly are,

i. blunt

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on Jan. 15 2010 at 12:39 pm
krisssss BRONZE, Nyack, New York
1 article 0 photos 25 comments
i love your poem, i think alot of people can relate to this. keep writing, i love how deep this is !

on Jan. 15 2010 at 9:24 am
FlyLikeAnEagle94 PLATINUM, Kingston, Pennsylvania
24 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I write about me because I know about me," by John Lennon.

This poem is VERY well written!! I can connect how you felt.

on Jan. 15 2010 at 9:14 am
paranomial PLATINUM, Hyderabad, Other
21 articles 0 photos 55 comments
superb poem! gt too much depth to it...n has been presented really well,with the correct words :) keep up the gud work:)all the best!

monkey said...
on Jan. 15 2010 at 7:50 am
i like this poem very unique one of a kind keep up the good work

jnieves45 said...
on Jan. 15 2010 at 7:46 am
this is absolutely beautiful; honestly one of the poems with most emotion around here:)

on Jan. 15 2010 at 1:11 am
JackJules SILVER, Los Angeles, California
8 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a very pessimistic view of life. You should know this about me if we're gonna go out. You know, I - I feel that life is - is divided up into the horrible and the miserable. Those are the two categories, you know. The - the horrible would be like, um, I don't know, terminal cases, you know, and blind people, crippled. I don't know how they get through life. It's amazing to me. You know, and the miserable is everyone else. That's - that's - so - so - when you go through life - you should be thankful that you're miserable because you're very lucky to be miserable."

Some of the word choice makes the poem incredibly convoluted. Sometimes, the simpler the better!

babe892 GOLD said...
on Jan. 6 2010 at 10:48 pm
babe892 GOLD, Suffern, New York
15 articles 6 photos 10 comments
this is really beautiful, so mature and vivid yet still evasive and vague (in a gorgeous way).

on Dec. 24 2009 at 10:56 pm
montana PLATINUM, Parker, Colorado
41 articles 2 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
cliche quotes I have are.....
I know, right? and..... Are you kidding me?

huh? I do not understand this. Well Merry Christmas.

on Dec. 24 2009 at 7:54 pm
Katie Mackes BRONZE, Lexington, South Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Like, Holy Shnikies, dude, you've really got something inside you.

this is art at is greatest.

thank you for making my day.

on Dec. 24 2009 at 7:50 am
The_Number_Five GOLD, Manassas, Virginia
16 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.
-- Dr. Seuss

I love this poem! Can you look at some of my poems and give me advice and stuff on them? Thanks!

on Dec. 11 2009 at 10:43 pm
Lucrecia SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
6 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No act of love is ever wasted". Geneen Roth

"Love not what you are, but what you may become". Miguel de Cervantes

This is amazing,its really deep and i can relate to the feeling. great job

Cady_ PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 2 2009 at 11:10 pm
Cady_ PLATINUM, Godley, Texas
25 articles 5 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never judge a book by its cover.", and "When you judge another, you do not define them, you define yourself." "Cherish your life." "Love equals eternity."

So many big words, was really good, but kind of hard to understand at first. Nice job.FIVE stars.

on Dec. 2 2009 at 8:08 pm
.xCutMyLifeIntoPiecesx. PLATINUM, Longmont, Colorado
35 articles 0 photos 82 comments
I really like that I have to read this slowly, multiple times in order to get the full effect of it because it is Just. That. Powerful.

Frye Sauce said...
on Dec. 2 2009 at 7:59 pm
Wow, this is so amazing. I too love the word choice. It really makes me think about what you're trying to say. Way to go! :)

LilBenj SILVER said...
on Dec. 2 2009 at 4:33 pm
LilBenj SILVER, Richfield, Utah
6 articles 4 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is a certain providence in the fall of a sparrow. - Hamlet

I love the word choice, and I understand what you're saying. It really is beautiful. I just think it's funny how, when people don't understand a poem, they think it's "deep." Your poem is vivid - but it is a new way to say something that's already been said, if you know what I mean.

on Dec. 2 2009 at 2:59 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

This is amazing. Simply. Purely. Amazing. Your word choice is so beautiful and vivid. Wow! I am still in awe. Fantastic work!

on Dec. 2 2009 at 2:35 pm
LOST_LOV3_12 SILVER, North Zulch, Texas
7 articles 1 photo 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't let the world get to you. if you do, you're in for a world of pain and despair."

this was really was really good too. great job

on Dec. 2 2009 at 1:58 pm
soinlove SILVER, Parish, New York
5 articles 0 photos 15 comments
omggggg i love this is soo good this is what i needed to read at this point thank you for wrighting it

Mscaledonia said...
on Dec. 2 2009 at 8:03 am
Mscaledonia, Fukuoka, Other
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
i believe that lovers should be tied together
thrown into the ocean in the worst of weather
left there to drown
left there to drown
in their innocence

I love how you use your "run on sentences" but it still flows really nicely. I love your words. :)

Amazing <3

gabigal SILVER said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 6:15 pm
gabigal SILVER, Conroe, Texas
6 articles 12 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"everything has beauty in it, you just have to see it"

i love this soooo much!!!! it's the word usages!!